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Guerilla: I Think I Stepped In Something
Posted by Mainevent (mainevent117@gmail.com)
4 November 2004, 1:56 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=mainevent.1104040156283.html

Mainevent · Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2004 2:27 am Post subject:

Also check out A Soldier's Story on page 2!! Thanks.

Walker · Member Joined: 29 Jul 2004 Posts: 11 Location: Texas

Hey, Main, didn't know you were still here. Sorry I don't have time to read your story right now--IB is so persistent about giving you more homework than you can handle. Just checking in--I'm doing great in JROTC, top of my class and one of 6 out of 24 to get promoted to PFC in my company. My battalion is a gold star unit (top 5% as worldwide JROTC battalions go), my instructor was an Airborne Ranger in Vietnam, and the Colonel, who subbed for us, was a Green Beret as well. So that's gotta be pretty good. I made rifle team, too, and I'm making all A's. Don't know when I'll be back, but I'll try and come again. Keep on trucking.

-Walker, the long lost and probably forgotten

PS: Sorry I crammed all that into one post.

Mainevent · Posted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 4:30 am Post subject:

I'm so lucky! 4 day weekend with no homework!

Hells yea!

SYSTEM · Posted: Sat Nov 13, 2004 3:15 am Post subject:

Hey, that was a good idea!

I love this so far...

It's going to be great. Heh, remember Apollo 13? (Yes, that's a number, not a word.) When Mrs Lovell had a nightmare about her husband? And the "Master Alarm?"

- Dave.

Pajari · Member Joined: 28 Sep 2004 Posts: 100 Location: Luna

Very good. This is a story to be proud of. Keep it up!

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

Nice. There were some places where it could have flowed better, or used a tad more detail or explenation. But, small stuff.
Would have liked a tad more story explenation, but, it was fine how it was for the purpose that you seemed to have.

Overall, it was well written and hade a good foundation for a good story. Keep it up.
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-MCC

Mainevent · Posted: Tue Nov 16, 2004 3:43 am Post subject:

As for story explanation I just needed to get him from point A to point B.

The next part should be englightening, or entertaining, or something.

I just make my stories up as I go so you have to bare with me. (That's why they tend to get a little long in one area and a bit short in others.)