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Halo: The Last Spartans Prologue

 
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 1:09 pm    Post subject: Halo: The Last Spartans Prologue Reply with quote
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Halo: The Last Spartans Prologue
Posted by Adam McCormick (Mccormickadamr@yahoo.com)
18 January 2007, 4:25 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Adam_McCormi0118070425521.html
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 11:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
It was okay, but you need to learn how to use CODE. Also, when the speaker changes you need to start a new paragraph. Other than that it was pretty good. 7/10
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PostPosted: Sat Jan 20, 2007 6:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Also, your Spartan is a sergeant- a Marine rank. Spartans are navy. Your Spartan would most likely be a Petty Officer, more or less.
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