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invasion 2-the war part 2
Posted by paul cooper (lcooper764@aol.com.)
12 January 2007, 9:22 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=paul_cooper0112070922061.html

Skul · Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 2:43 pm Post subject:

It's evident you haven't listened to us at all. No capitals, numbers mixed with letters, grammar errors, punctuations errors, spelling mistakes, lack of detail, story going by too quickly, abrupt switching of viewpoints, "chapters", not taking a new line when the next character is speaking, and no Code.

...I give up.
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Halo Fanatic 2006 · Posted: Fri Jan 19, 2007 5:10 pm Post subject:

Geez, are you blind?

SYSTEM · Posted: Sat Jan 20, 2007 2:33 am Post subject:

I sent this guy an email.

On the other hand, since I'm feeling particularly nasty today, you guys go ahead and say what you like. Within reason of course. Pain is the best teacher.

Kid, you're gonna need to start listening to advice if you expect to get any positive feedback. If you need a little hand I'll be more than happy to put you through a crash course in writing. Of course, if you wanna release sub-par stuff, that's entirely up to you, but at least take it somewhere else.

- Dave.
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Archangel_7 · Posted: Sun Jan 21, 2007 2:46 am Post subject:

No.

Just, no.
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Arawn · Member Joined: 03 Dec 2006 Posts: 5

It could be that he never checks the comments. Lets wait to see if he changes after reading that email. Im willing to give him a fourth chance Wink