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Joined: 25 Jul 2004 Posts: 4377
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Halo Fanatic 2006 Member

Joined: 17 Apr 2006 Posts: 139 Location: Azeroth, I can't find my way out!
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Posted: Sat Jan 13, 2007 7:18 pm Post subject: |
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sorry I didn't read the first story but this pretty good, I really liked it, keep it up. Oh, and watch those GPS mistakes.
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Joined: 21 Dec 2006 Posts: 3 Location: texas
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Posted: Wed Jan 17, 2007 10:10 pm Post subject: |
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Quite good, besides the typos, and those are inevitable. One thing, though, is that your characters (humans in particular, but Covenant as well) seem rather listless and inattentive. I find it highly unlikely that a highly trained and experienced soldier such as MC would be so unnerved by the Flood that he would forget how many rounds are in his BR55.
Of course, the whole story seems quite implausible, so maybe that's okay. (Not that implausibility is a bad thing....) Keep up the good work! |
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