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Stories of a Soundtrack -- Part 3
Posted by The Meep (HaloFanatic101@yahoo.com)
21 December 2006, 7:58 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=The_Meep1221061958371.html

[kr1]

Alright, this was very good. I liked your Covenant perspective, you did the formal dialogue of the Elites well. The description of the antimatter bomb's inner workings was good, too.

The only real problem I had with this was some of the zero-G stuff. Firing weapons in zero gravity would send the marines all over the place. Minor detail. Another one, though, is about the MAC platform spinning. By the time of 2552 I don't think the UNSC uses spinning of their ships for gravity. I think it's one of the things they've stolen from the Covenant. That's not official, though, just my own conclusions, so it's not important.
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[Phædrus]

Uh... Hehe.

Ever fired a high powered rifle? Or hell, even a carbine? That's a pretty decent amount of recoil. If you fire an M1 Garand and you're not holding it tight it'll give you a pretty decent bruise. A BR55, which is supposedly a 9x33mm, would have recoil midway between that of an AK and a Garand. That'll push you around quite a bit, especially firing bursts.

[kr1]

[Spartan006]

Maybe, it was just the way kr-1426 wrote it made it seem as though they would shoot and be blown an extreme distance. There would obviously be recoil, and no I haven't fired a high powered weapon before, but I don't think that even with zero-Gs you would be thrown around alot.
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[Phædrus]

Well, I do love to drag out a point...

Reduction of recoil means reduction of power, and vice-versa. Simple physics. "Each action has an equal and opposite reaction." The damage a bullet causes comes from its energy, and the way that energy is concentrated into a small point. Due to Newton's law, the gun will come back at you with the same amount of energy. However, since the butt of the gun has more surface area than the tip of a bullet, it doesn't hurt you nearly as much as the bullet hurts the other guy. The only two ways to reduce recoil are these: increase the mass of the gun, or decrease the energy of the bullet. Those are the only ways. Recoil pads and fancy mercury vial crap they have on sniper rifles just spread the recoil out over a longer time - all that energy comes right back at you no matter what. So even with all that "recoil reducing" stuff, a shot will still push you back, and god help you if you're using an SMG.

And I'm out.

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[kr1]

Well, I was thinking muzzle brakes and stuff, but now that I think of it, that wouldn't too much. Plus, there's no visible muzzle brake on the BR55.

And Meep, even though we seem to be making a big deal of this, it doesn't detract from the story. at least, not in my opinion.
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[Phædrus]

Yeah, we're just military/scientific accuracy freaks.

[kr1]

[Spartan006]

[kr1]

[Spartan006]

Eh, not the same story then, never mind.
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[The Meep]

LOL!

Well, upon rereading my story before posting, I did notice that, and smacked myself in the forehead. I'm a sticker for realism, but I missed that. Besides, with very few exceptions, the Marines are braced against a wall, crate, etc.

The only thing I noticed about the lack of recoil was when Fora got flown off into the Covenant formation in null G. She was firing with a rifle the whole time. I forgot that the resulting recoil would've actually propelled her away from the Covenant formation (and probably saved her life).

Also, about the MAC stopping it's rotation. I figured, since in Halo: First Strike Haverson stated that some UNSC were undergoing experimental artificial gravity trials, the tech hadn't been fully developed for wide spread refit. I also doubted that the engineers would have fitted such a crucial installation with experimental, and possibly faulty, tech when there was a perfectly safe alternative that worked well (spinning).

And kr? Thanks for the comment on my Covenant speech. I've always preferred writing from the Covenant's perspective: so much more room for improvisation, y'know? And I also love the Elite's personal honor and warrior's code, as well as the way they speak. So poetic and artistic; it's just amazing.

Well, thanks for all the comments! This is just awesome; finally getting feedback on my writing.

~I~

[kr1]