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Ghosts of Erebus: Prologue
Posted by Chuckles
30 October 2004, 7:55 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=chuckles.1030040755301.html

Jeremy · Member Joined: 25 Sep 2004 Posts: 5

Pretty interesting. Watch out for simple grammar and spelling mistakes.

It was a little confusing at times.

Oh and don't forget to [indent] your paragraphs.

Chuckles · Posted: Wed Nov 03, 2004 1:43 am Post subject:

Yeah, I left a "the" out in a sentence and it made it very confusing. I go over my stories numerous times before posting, but I always find one or two I missed.

C.T. Clown

Chuckles · Posted: Wed Nov 03, 2004 1:48 am Post subject:

For those wondering, this is the confusing sentence I mentioned. The word I left out is in brackets:

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

Hey, you can't catch everything.

You know, you always work some sort of clown into your stories. Reminds me it "It."

Anyway, the writing was good as usual. No major flaws, jsut the kind of stuff that you already pointed out.

Overall, nice. It went by a little fast, but, then again, it was a prologue, and so massive amounts of details were not needed. Keep up the good work.
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(Na)Marl · Posted: Thu Nov 04, 2004 5:30 am Post subject:

--This is Gold Elite. My dad deleted my e-mail adress before I could activate my account, so that sucks. I have to use my Halo multiplayer name, but oh well.
--Well, good job, again. It was great. It's 11:29 where I am, I'm tired, and could barely pay attention, but I did my best. Keep it up. Can't wait to read more.

Helljumper · Member Joined: 31 Jul 2004 Posts: 298 Location: Pittsburgh

That was interesting. Good, i'll follow.
ODST

Chuckles · Posted: Fri Nov 05, 2004 8:10 am Post subject:

Thanks guys.

MC, they aren't "Clowns" per se. Just an accidental nickname, as you will find out further into the story. The reason for the name was explained in Mission from SATU part 3: Clowns Can't Draw, but I don't assume anyone read that series, or remembers the explanation. Each story has to stand on its own.

C.T. Clown

Solidus Snake · Posted: Fri Nov 05, 2004 11:38 pm Post subject:

I'm not too familar with your work but this is good. I think I'm gonna like this series. Keep it up!

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

Neither am I. Sadly, I didn't get into that series until the eigth or so chapter. I enjoyed it, but never had time to go back and read it. But yes, you are correct in that a series should explain its details in one way or another.

I was kinda joking about the clown thing though. Works for me. Hey, I think it adds a sort of special touch to your stories. But, whatever...
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Solidus Snake · Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2004 2:16 am Post subject:

I want to see a story about blood thirsty insane clowns killing the Covenant. That would be wicked.

Syotica · Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2004 12:07 pm Post subject:

Now that is good. Can't wait to see what happens next...

Oh, and Solidus, I don't think the Covenant are scared of Superstious things like Ghosts...

Solidus Snake · Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2004 6:27 pm Post subject:

Insane clowns are ghosts.

Syotica · Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2004 7:39 pm Post subject:

Solidus Snake · Posted: Sun Nov 07, 2004 12:59 am Post subject:

Wait, don't say oh, I meant, insane clowns aren't ghost.