HBO Fan Fiction

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Guerilla: Just Another Tree Hugger
Posted by Mainevent (mainevent117@gmail.com)
24 October 2004, 10:11 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=mainevent.1024042211432.html

Pajari · Member Joined: 28 Sep 2004 Posts: 100 Location: Luna

Pretty good. I had no problems with it. The action was well-paced and intelligent, and the description was perfect. Overall this is a story to be proud of. I look forward to it's continuation.

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

I noticed a couple of grammar mistakes in there; a place or two lacked proper punctuation. Come now, Main, that's sloppy; I know you can do better!

Mainevent · Posted: Fri Oct 29, 2004 8:49 pm Post subject:

Thanks Pajari and MCC. It means a lot.

I've been kinda rushed lately. My school work just keeps piling and piling up. This one was sloppier than normal, but I'm going to write a sequel this weekend. And, since I finally managed to get all of it done, I can proofread. (This was proofread when I actually read it on the site.)

And I'll work on those Covenant personalities a little better. But this time I did make them a little less religiously zealous for a reason. If you read Mr. Sandman the Covenant Elites there are extremely religious.

As for the next part...I hope you guys like wacky space battles.

JCDentonCZ · Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2004 12:09 am Post subject:

After observing the whole community for surely three years, keeping a eye about every day on the whole fanfiction..."Industry", Mainevent takes all his knowledge into a story of his own.

Its two 0' clock here, no time reading at the moment.

But I will check them out as you did with the MCconto Chronicles of mine in 2003... beware... Razz

Later, Main. Wink

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Mainevent · Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2004 12:45 am Post subject:

You scare me JC...you scare me good.

Nick Kang · Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2004 1:47 pm Post subject:

Big explosions are gooooooooood...*twitch*

Yeah, it wasn't as up-to-date grammar wise as some of your other stories I read, but it was still very good, but somewhat rough when he sent the Ghost into the ship, and again when he got into the Banshee.
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Solidus Snake · Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2004 2:30 pm Post subject:

Nice story, Main. Keep up this grade of work. And yeah, school messes with my writing too so I end up writing some very quick wierd shit about Grunts, lol. Good luck man!

Guardian · Posted: Sun Oct 31, 2004 2:16 am Post subject:

Never had any problems reading your stories, no mistakes i saw, and that it was always BADASS!

FuManChu · Member Joined: 31 Oct 2004 Posts: 2 Location: colorado

I thought it was good. Nice job.

SYSTEM · Posted: Sun Oct 31, 2004 5:25 pm Post subject:

ohooooo....

Very very good.... I'm lovin' it (not Macdonalds).

- Dave.
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Mainevent · Posted: Sun Oct 31, 2004 11:45 pm Post subject:

Thanks guys. My weekend has been busier than expected, and as such I haven't been able to write much. But expect something in probably the update after next.

Syotica · Posted: Tue Nov 02, 2004 12:22 pm Post subject:

That is pretty good, nice detail, grammar... You name it!

~Insomnia & 'Ala 'Omnamamee

Grunt-Boy · Posted: Tue Nov 02, 2004 8:09 pm Post subject:

Shayap... pretty funny. Yayap.

Good story. I liked the action. The drama. The suspense. Well...maybe not the last two cause I forgot what I just read.

HoZ · Posted: Thu Nov 04, 2004 10:39 pm Post subject:

FREAKIN awasome, and i feel your pain with the school work thing, just keep it up and enjoy the praises,

ROCK ON