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Umbra Ac Cinis (Part One)
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 22, 2006 1:25 pm    Post subject: Umbra Ac Cinis (Part One) Reply with quote

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Umbra Ac Cinis (Part One)
Posted by Arthur Wellesley (arthur_wellesly@hotmail.com)
22 September 2006, 3:50 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Arthur_Welle0922060350291.html
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 22, 2006 9:32 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

When Louis Wu mentioned that there were some doozies, I think he meant this. Awesome!
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 22, 2006 9:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Arthur, whoever you are-

Great writing! I'm astounded by the quality. Have you taken many writing courses before? You write like somebody who has been doing so for quite some time. I love the dialogue between Cooke and Travis, it all flows very naturally, and the back-and-forth between the two of them is very convincing. You paint a nice picture, and the atmosphere is great as well. I'd like to see a few more concrete details about the surroundings, the scenery, etc. That is just a minor complaint, but I found my mind having to figure out exactly what everything looked like.

I'm very interested to see what you have developing here, and how this all seems to relate to the Halo universe. A virus? Very curious.

Can't wait to read more.
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 22, 2006 11:54 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Excellently written, extremely creepy and nasty!

Love the use of your descriptive explanations to describe events and places. The way I would write, actually, if I could write this well Laughing
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PostPosted: Sat Sep 23, 2006 3:59 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'm a man of few words.

It was excellent.
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PostPosted: Sat Sep 23, 2006 4:41 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks a lot for the comments, guys.

I'll reveal more details in the coming chapter, Pwnocchio.

Thanks again.

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PostPosted: Sat Sep 23, 2006 4:49 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

For the Latin-impaired, such as me, what does 'Umbra ac Cinis' mean?

Great story, by the way, Arthur.
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PostPosted: Sat Sep 23, 2006 11:40 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I just had a little poke about the Internet for the translation to that, Azathoth, and what I got was (probably wrong as I wasn't sure what the actual definition for the individual words are and I probably massacred it in translating the whole phrase) something along the lines of "In the shadow of darkness before the ashes". Haha, tell me how far off I was. Oh, and I intend to read this, soon.
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 24, 2006 12:15 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice one, as usual. Smile
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 24, 2006 8:34 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Commander Demitri Wolf wrote:
I just had a little poke about the Internet for the translation to that, Azathoth, and what I got was (probably wrong as I wasn't sure what the actual definition for the individual words are and I probably massacred it in translating the whole phrase) something along the lines of "In the shadow of darkness before the ashes". Haha, tell me how far off I was. Oh, and I intend to read this, soon.


Close enough Smile

Thanks, guys.

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PostPosted: Sun Sep 24, 2006 9:31 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Whenever I write a Halo story, I endeavor to ensure that I don't delve too deeply into the Haloverse as to now alienate those who aren't fans of Halo are aren't that well-versed with it to begin with.

This is a story that barely needs the Halo setting, and works wonderfully so.

Pure brilliance, pal. Out of all the details, the one thing that was most disturbing was that the man was eating a child, a little girl. Cannbalism has been used in other mediums, but this is definitely the first time I've seen a child as a victim. Truly unsettling.

Fine, fine work, sir.
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PostPosted: Mon Sep 25, 2006 1:41 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hmm, I don't get around here much, but I try to check in to see how people are doing (the young rising stars of HBO Smile ). Well, this one stood out, but not for the right reasons (brace yourself...).

I haven't read this, but no doubt it is superb. Probably GPS clean with excellent plot behind it. When I do get to it, I'll smile in the fact that you've continued to write superb stuff. However, until that point, I'm going to have to frown in disappointment.

There's one of two things. Either you dropped another series (Here Lies Sarah Eaton) or you're trying to dual-compose them both. In any case, I'm not happy with your choice, since I think we've gone over finishing what you start, and you probably already know that you can't write two series at once with consistency and at the same composition level.

Please tell me I missed something and you didn't do either of the above, because if you did (as it appears to me know), I'm quite displeased with your choice.

-R
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PostPosted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 6:55 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

You had me shivering.

Art, that was Chuckles creepy.
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PostPosted: Tue Sep 26, 2006 8:06 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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Whenever I write a Halo story, I endeavor to ensure that I don't delve too deeply into the Haloverse as to now alienate those who aren't fans of Halo are aren't that well-versed with it to begin with.


Yea, same here. The further from cannon you stray, the more creative you can be.

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Art, that was Chuckles creepy.


High praise Smile

Thanks a lot for the feedback, guys. I eagerly anticipate your input, russ.

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PostPosted: Wed Sep 27, 2006 4:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

You have done what only Chuckles have done to me, but with less scary words.
In the words of a famous Grunt, Sir Grunty the weak, ME SCARED
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