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86, Irvine Part One

 
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 22, 2006 1:24 pm    Post subject: 86, Irvine Part One Reply with quote

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86, Irvine Part One
Posted by Vinziah Arcus (were.midget@gmail.com)
20 September 2006, 4:53 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Vinziah_Arcu0920060453191.html
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PostPosted: Mon Sep 25, 2006 7:03 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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This is the first part of a series about a rebel Spartan. Part One tells the story of his escape from the complex on Reach. I hope you all enjoy it. Constructive criticsm please!!
Noooooo!!! You've just destroyed the fun. Always, unless it is needed for some strange reason, try to stay away from stuff that gives away the entire story. Some people may not even get to the first paragraph because of this. Besides that there wasn't really anything bad about the story. 7/10
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PostPosted: Mon Sep 25, 2006 11:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very Happy

Good stuff, dude.
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PostPosted: Mon Sep 25, 2006 11:24 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Run it through spellcheck. GPS errors galore, also.

Avoid the AN please. Looks sloppy.
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Vinziah Arcus
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PostPosted: Thu Sep 28, 2006 3:40 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

To Syotica, everything in my fan fiction is spellchecked and correct. Anything you see to be incorrect is correct to me - In English New Zealand.

The Fan Fiction rules state that a writing has to be written in English though don't specify which form of english, for example:
Metres - New Zealand
Meters - American

To the other posters thanks for your responses.
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Matthiasthe14th
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PostPosted: Thu Sep 28, 2006 4:28 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Cool story, my friend. One of my favourite parts was here:

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"Shit…" he swore under his breath as he read the last line: 'Suppressed sexual drive.'


Haha, anyway, good one. I absolutely don't mind "New Zealand speak" at all. Very Happy

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