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hboff
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Spartan006
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| Quote: | This is the first part of a series about a rebel Spartan. Part One tells the story of his escape from the complex on Reach. I hope you all enjoy it. Constructive criticsm please!!
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Noooooo!!! You've just destroyed the fun. Always, unless it is needed for some strange reason, try to stay away from stuff that gives away the entire story. Some people may not even get to the first paragraph because of this. Besides that there wasn't really anything bad about the story. 7/10
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LykaiosFreedom
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Good stuff, dude. |
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Syotica
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Run it through spellcheck. GPS errors galore, also.
Avoid the AN please. Looks sloppy. |
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Vinziah Arcus
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To Syotica, everything in my fan fiction is spellchecked and correct. Anything you see to be incorrect is correct to me - In English New Zealand.
The Fan Fiction rules state that a writing has to be written in English though don't specify which form of english, for example:
Metres - New Zealand
Meters - American
To the other posters thanks for your responses. |
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Matthiasthe14th
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Cool story, my friend. One of my favourite parts was here:
| Quote: | | "Shit…" he swore under his breath as he read the last line: 'Suppressed sexual drive.' |
Haha, anyway, good one. I absolutely don't mind "New Zealand speak" at all.
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