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Halo: Stealth Combat Evolved: Part 2-Chapter 8

 
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 28, 2004 2:29 pm    Post subject: Halo: Stealth Combat Evolved: Part 2-Chapter 8 Reply with quote

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Halo: Stealth Combat Evolved: Part 2-Chapter 8
Posted by Mind_Affecting_Parasite (pbplayer_24@yahoo.com)
24 October 2004, 2:41 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=mind_affecti.1024040241529.html
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 30, 2004 3:28 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hmm. No comments. A bit disapointing and discouraging, if I do say.

Anyway, now that I actually have time to make it here, I must say this:
Sorry about the delay. Computer problems have been happening in this house (not on my computer) and so some stuff had to be postponed.

Hope somebody get's something out of this.
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 30, 2004 4:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Sorry I'm Late!

This is good. I love it. You've got a great blend of detail, dialogue, and awesomeness.

- Dave.
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 31, 2004 6:01 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

That was great, no complaints. The writing was beautiful, the details were on point. It was good, can't wait for the next chapter.

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PostPosted: Sun Oct 31, 2004 11:40 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

As usual MAP, awsome.
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 01, 2004 10:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Phew. Thanks guys. I thought for a couple days that no one was gonna read this.

I work pretty hard on my details. Usually, I don't have anyone proofread this, 'cause most of my friends are members here and so, let's just say I like to keep my surprises.

Speaking of that, I'm glad you want to see the next chapter. The end was actually a hastey add on at the last minute. I knew at this point I needed something to keep attention.

I had better get writing. Now, where's MCC at?
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 01, 2004 11:02 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Why, MAP, here I am. I, unfortunately, got here late also. But, it was from a party, so...

Anyway, excellent work as always. But, it wouldn't be my comment without a few things to look out for in the future.
I noticed a few places where things didn't flow as I thought they should have. Slight grammar mistakes and such. A few punctuation errors were present as well. Also, I saw a few spelling, or rather typing, errors; so just keep your eyes open for them.

Overall, a good addition; you're holding strong to a firm writing style. Make sure to keep an eye out for those little mistakes; they just make things look not as good. Keep reading that 'Clancy.
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 01, 2004 9:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

*must control shaking hands*

Well thats good but I wish I could focus and stop convulsing long enough to read the comment.

*has short seisure*

I kinda got... a magazine and it... has and... it's called... OXM... with a Hal.... Halo ta.... Halo 2! article in it... I am trying to ignore the impulse to read every bit of it, but not because I want to experience it all for myself first... I think I might just explode... or die.

*falls over*
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 02, 2004 1:31 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow. Do I envy you right now.

*goes out and buys OXM*
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 02, 2004 2:16 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Great story, as usual. I'll be watching for the next installment.

And yeah, the OXM is great. Go ahead and cut the sealed section, there are pretty much no spoilers in there, unless you are one of the people who thought the previous revealation of the new enemy was a spoiler. There are some good things in the sealed section, things that will fill you with a warm, fuzzy, happy feeling.
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 12, 2004 4:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow...it was like...and then you...he said that...wow!!!
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