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Kahn's Manreapers - A Poem

 
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PostPosted: Thu Jul 29, 2004 2:51 pm    Post subject: Kahn's Manreapers - A Poem Reply with quote

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Kahn's Manreapers - A Poem
Posted by Conrad Lauf (conniesworld_aka_hell@hotmail.com)
22 July 2004, 10:23 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=conrad_lauf.0722041023271.html
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PostPosted: Thu Jul 29, 2004 6:51 pm    Post subject: Not bad Reply with quote

Not too bad, I enjoyed the poem.

Only comment is I'm not sure how this poem is Halo related. But hey, that's not my call.

Keep up the great writing.
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PostPosted: Thu Jul 29, 2004 10:35 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Pretty good. I liked it. It was a good call to add that little paragraph at the end so as to clarify on the subject a bit. Nicely done.
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 30, 2004 8:05 am    Post subject: wow Reply with quote

wow cool poem






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PostPosted: Fri Jul 30, 2004 6:26 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very interesting. The poem told an interesting story in an interesting way. I liked it. Sorry, but interesting is the only word in my vocabulary that describes the poem even remotely well. Indeed, I could ramble on for a bit and say exactly how I feel in about 5400 words, but I don't think anyone wants to hear me talk that much. Wink
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 26, 2005 4:03 pm    Post subject: Cole Policy? Reply with quote

I thought it was called the Cole Protocol
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 26, 2005 4:06 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I think Manreapers refers to the Flood.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 26, 2005 4:14 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice, I liked the way you worked words in this one.

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 26, 2005 9:37 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

A shit load of poems this update. Thankfully, most of them have been pretty sadisfactory. This was one of them.

That endnote makes this sound like a good idea for a series. I believe it could be very good. But do work hard on it if you decide to do so.


I thought the poem could have flowed a bit more from line to line in places. Just seemed like it could have been more smooth.

Overall, this was good. I liked it. Keep up the work.
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