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Legacy: The Conclusion to the 500,000 Year-Old Saga of Guns & Lightsabers
Posted by SeverianofUrth
14 September 2006, 3:22 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=SeverianofUr0914061522211.html

Commander Demitri Wolf · Posted: Fri Sep 15, 2006 11:29 pm Post subject:

Well, I've been following this, and I hope that when you say conclusion you don't mean the whole thing is over, cause you've set yourself up a rather nice little story to continue here. I really did like the connections to Star Wars in there and how well it was done; the mention of Revan was enough to further intrique me, especially seeing as though he should be dead...

Or maybe I'm wrong, but I wasn't aware that anyone from KOTOR - even Revan - survived into the dawn of the Galactic Empire (it was four thousand years between them wasn't it?).

Oh well, congratulations on a really enjoyable series.

Cassus Falco · Posted: Fri Sep 15, 2006 11:44 pm Post subject:

Hey, man, and James. Pretty good, for a cross over, but with a few plot holes on the Star Wars side of things; in the first section is that blue lightsabre Yoda's?

I'm one hundred and ten percent positive that Yoda's weapon was as green as (as the Revenge of the Sith novelisation said) 'green as sunlight in a forest glade'

Ha ha, I guess I shouldn't really be talking about minor plot holes like that, when there is a yawning plot chasm behind me. But I won't get into that.

Anyways, thanks for a good read

Hardballer · Posted: Sat Sep 16, 2006 1:21 am Post subject:

That damned Cortana is still alive?

Very clever... I would never have even contemplated mixing Starwars and Halo, but there you have it.

I'll get right on to reading the rest of it.

bowog the grunt · Member Joined: 16 Jun 2006 Posts: 51 Location: the TARDIS

that was sad, strangly i almost cried. the last sentece was so bland though!

Azathoth · Posted: Sun Sep 17, 2006 7:03 pm Post subject:

I wouldn't say bland. It's a nice constrast to the frenetic pace of the story, and it gives a certain amount of humor value to say that there's a set of MJOLNIR armor floating around Star Wars on the black market.

SeverianofUrth · Posted: Mon Sep 18, 2006 3:07 pm Post subject:

Radont · Member Joined: 21 Jul 2005 Posts: 36 Location: Michigan

thedarkfire · Posted: Tue Sep 19, 2006 2:12 pm Post subject:

Well, keep writing.

The death of John. It almost felt so...anti climatic. Like he was supposed to go down fighting instead of standing.

Well I guess that's life.

Matthiasthe14th · Posted: Thu Sep 21, 2006 7:41 pm Post subject:

That was an interesting twist to the end, there. Took me totally by surprise. Anyway, I really liked this series. Very Happy

It's cool how you framed the time periods and all. The UNSC securing the galaxy for human superiority... I like that, too.

10/10

Arthur Wellesley · Member Joined: 30 Jun 2006 Posts: 306 Location: Canada

Another fantastic piece of work, Sev. This was, as I've come to expect, riddled with the clever and nuanced touches you've proven youself adept at devising and implementing. I liked the bit where the Twi'lek is shot, and on the other side of the door an unnamed guard detects a faint burning odor. It all serves to set the atmosphere up very well and makes for a thoroughly entertaining read.

There was some really colorful language here, too. I also found myself moved by the Master Chief's death. First by Yoda's discovery and then by the MC's own recollections of his life. Interestingly, the tone wasn't overtly mournful; you didn't seem to try too hard to elicit sadness. It was perhaps this which added to its success.

I loved how Cortana and the Chief end up together in a bizarre AI netherworld. A fitting ending, somehow, to the Chief. Nice dialogue between these two, as well. Equally fitting.

Lastly, points for originality. A Star Wars and Halo amalgam is not the easiest thing to pull off, and you did it very well. I like the idea of Cortana making a digital copy of him as well.

I didn't find any real errors, and I have no general complaints. Great work.

- Arthur
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