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Vignettes of Horror: Happiness, War, Vagina, and The Dead Girl
Posted by SeverianofUrth
24 August 2006, 4:36 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=SeverianofUr0824061636331.html

[Dr Sky Tower]

Eh? Uh, ok...

This story is just too weird for my liking.

Female reproductive anatomy to describe "war"

Oooohkay. I take it this must be a poetic description of war. Right.

[CoLd BlooDed]

Sky Tower, if you knew anything about what Severian's writing is like, you wouldn't say something like that. Instead, you'd take it in and enjoy the originality of this story.

[Mech]

Ok, this was in almost NO WAY RELATED to Halo at all, except for the Harvest part, along with the slight Spartan reference.

This was physcopath's story. No sense at all, made up words (wtf did the brocolli word mean!?), and just....weird plot.

2/10 (1/10 being gibberish), just for actually writing something.

Please, don't write again. You'll probably get a cult of freaks to follow you, somehow claiming getting a message off of this.

[thedarkfire]

Mech you ignorant fool.

Read it in a bit Sev

[CoLd BlooDed]

[Azrael]

Part of the challenge of Halo Fan Fiction is move beyond the pale of normal storylines. Haven't read it yet, Sev, but I will absolutely defend a fan fic that makes at least passing reference to the Haloverse.

If we judged works on how much they related to the Haloverse, no one would read Russ687's "Acts of Conspiracy," arguably his best work.

As for psychopathic characters and disturbing plotlines, what would we do with poor Chuckles, one of our authors? We'd be missing some literary treats THERE, kiddies.

Whatever shocks us, terrifies us, thrills us, kills us, saddens us, makes us, breaks us; fills ourselves with passion, pride, anger, joy, or any kind of emotion...THAT is what we, as authors, should strive for.

At the risk of sounding mean to Mech (no offense), but I'm proud to be a Sev cult member.
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...now that's some gritty shizzle.

[Mech]

I would much rather post my reply in the form of a Private Message, so this thread dosen't turn into a war abot Sev's writing talent. But I don't want to be seen as someone who will not publicly defend his opion.

To me, this story didn't really make sense to me at all. Of course, I haven't been here long, or seen Sev's other work. But from my point of view, it seemed like a story that had no coherency at all. I mean, where did that word he made up come from? And also, the second half did not have any relation to the first half to me. It went from a girl becoming a SPARTAN and being happily married with a, um 'vagina' and then losing everything but her vagina, to a girl who seemed a polar opposite getting a anime cosmetic makeover.

You probably see a message in this, but to me, all I see is two halfs of two different stories.

I admit the cult comments were harsh, so I take them back.

And the only reason I said it was almost in no way related to the Halo universe was to underline my confusion in this story even being considered a Halo fanfic.

And for the psychopath comment also, it was alittle overboard, but thats what the author seemed to be to me because of the above-mentioned reasons about what I thought of the story.

I stand by my decision to give this a low score, but maybe i'm missing something that explains this fan fic better. Maybe with more time reading his stuff will have me look back at my last post and slap myself in the head with a blunt spoon for being such a shallow moron.

And sorry if everyone starts arguing about how good Sev is after this post, but I don't really see it right now.

-Mech

[SYSTEM]

Mech, Sev's done serious writing, and random writing.


Sev, you're nuts. Just when I thought you couldn't get nutsier!

Despite being totally random, y'still manage to hold together and keep everything clear, understandable, and the shorter sentence structure allows for quick punchlines.

Reminds me of the rant I did on cosmetic surgery back at the ole' rant site.

Nuts, man, nuts!

- Dave.
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"Lizzie Borden took an axe and gave her mother forty whacks. When she saw what she had done, she gave her father forty-one." - A child's nursery rhyme.

"When in doubt, empty your magazine." - Murphy's first law of combat operations.

[Guardian]

Sev doesn't follow the usual guidelines like we do, he instead opts to a chaotic fashion, but still holds true to the stories existing within the Halo universe.

Just because there isn't a blattant connection doesn't mean the story doesn't exist in the Haloverse, it doesn't necessary have to be from the point of view of a Spartan or a Marine.

I found the story to be very interesting Sev, nice job as always. I loved this part especially the most

[Chuckles]

Mech wrote:

[Azrael]

Now, to a different matter (by the by, I think we have this week's "Most controversial submission" winner )

Mech, I absolutely stand by your decision to give Sev a low grade. Having not read it yet, I can't tell you if I think you're right, but I don't think ANY member should be attacked for giving an author a low rating if the author is established and respected. I was opposed to some of the things you said, true, but I will fully defend the right to say you didn't like it. So please keep that in mind.

I think we all appreciate, from time to time, being taken to task on a chapter that was not our finest hour. "Dem's the breaks, kid."

...And at some point I'll be SURE to review this.

...One last thing (and please don't discuss this on this thread), some dedicated person should review all the stories for the week and put up a "Best submission," "Most controversial," "Most n00b," etc. That would be interesting and a great conversation starter. That's all I have to say about that.
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...now that's some gritty shizzle.

[Chuckles]

The first part of this story was creative (as usual), but not exactly my cup of tea. You were quite graphic in your language and I don't think I understand the reason behind it all. Perhaps there is no reason, or maybe you prefer to let the reader respond as they will and leave it at that. Still, one of the things I love about your writing is your ability to attack a subject from oblique angles, and you certainly did that here.

I did, however, liked this bit:

[Azathoth]

This was really pretty disturbing. I haven't seen many stories more disturbing than this since I came here. Man, you're good at writing, Sev.

[Mech]