HBO Fan Fiction

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The Stronghold
Posted by Grantix (eightypercentblinding@yahoo.com)
23 August 2006, 11:50 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Grantix0823062350111.html

Dr Sky Tower · Posted: Sat Aug 26, 2006 1:26 am Post subject:

You need to use the code rather than just left indenting the whole story, it looks and reads a lot better.

Otherwise, not bad!

Spartan006 · Posted: Sat Aug 26, 2006 2:39 pm Post subject:

That was excellent except for one thing, there was no use of indention or block paragraphing. If you would have done that I would have no complaints about it, besides the fact that it's not a series. You did a very good job of portraying your characters. You want people to care about your characters, and you've made me care. You should write a series. I'll be looking forward to some more stories from you Wink

. 8/10
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Syotica · Posted: Sat Aug 26, 2006 3:23 pm Post subject:

Space your lines out and indent.