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PostPosted: Fri Aug 11, 2006 10:02 am    Post subject: Pirates of Harvest: Passive Pat Reply with quote

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Pirates of Harvest: Passive Pat
Posted by Nosolee (crugg2005@gmail.com)
11 August 2006, 2:32 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Nosolee0811060232471.html
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 11, 2006 5:25 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

You need to space out some of those lines, but I like the story; quite unique. Keep it up, and be sure to add as much detail as possible on new storylines to not confuse the reader.
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PostPosted: Sat Aug 12, 2006 12:42 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Here is where it get's a little tricky. I seperated the big paragraphs but I have a whole string of dialogue toward the end of the story. Should I seperate all of the many lines of dialogue? Would that look too spaced out?
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PostPosted: Sat Aug 12, 2006 12:52 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I've seen a few stories where the dialogue is spaced out. I think it would be fine. Wink
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