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Pirates of Harvest: Passive Pat
Posted by Nosolee (crugg2005@gmail.com)
11 August 2006, 2:32 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Nosolee0811060232471.html

Syotica · Posted: Fri Aug 11, 2006 5:25 pm Post subject:

You need to space out some of those lines, but I like the story; quite unique. Keep it up, and be sure to add as much detail as possible on new storylines to not confuse the reader.

'Nosolee · Member Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 73 Location: Manhattan

Here is where it get's a little tricky. I seperated the big paragraphs but I have a whole string of dialogue toward the end of the story. Should I seperate all of the many lines of dialogue? Would that look too spaced out?

Syotica · Posted: Sat Aug 12, 2006 12:52 am Post subject:

I've seen a few stories where the dialogue is spaced out. I think it would be fine. Wink