HBO Fan Fiction Forum Index HBO Fan Fiction
Forum for HBO Fan Fiction Related Stuff
 
 FAQFAQ   SearchSearch   MemberlistMemberlist   UsergroupsUsergroups   RegisterRegister 
 ProfileProfile   Log in to check your private messagesLog in to check your private messages   Log inLog in 

Commander: Treachery

 
Post new topic   Reply to topic    HBO Fan Fiction Forum Index -> Fan Fiction Comments
View previous topic :: View next topic  
Author Message
hboff
Site Admin


Joined: 25 Jul 2004
Posts: 4356

PostPosted: Fri Jul 21, 2006 11:40 am    Post subject: Commander: Treachery Reply with quote

This topic is for posting comments to:

Commander: Treachery
Posted by Cthulhu117 (spartan_eric_271@yahoo.com)
20 July 2006, 12:29 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Cthulhu1170720061229121.html
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message
Azathoth
Member


Joined: 22 Nov 2005
Posts: 578
Location: South Africa. Fooken creatshas.

PostPosted: Sun Jul 23, 2006 5:16 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Meep. I just belatedly spotted a few of my own typos.

I also just realized that unless Bungie want to use my plot for Halo 3, this was destined to be AU anyway.

Ummm....oops?

Eh, you guys probably don't care about that anyway.
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message
Azathoth
Member


Joined: 22 Nov 2005
Posts: 578
Location: South Africa. Fooken creatshas.

PostPosted: Mon Jul 24, 2006 1:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks. It's nice to know that my series can still get a new fan to come out and say something about it. At times I feel like my story is stagnating, but then another one of you guys pops out of the woodwork and convinces me that it's worth it. Thanks to all you fans, Dagorath, HF2006 and STEEL RAIN most notably, but also Kodyack and pretty much everyone else who's commented on my stories at one time or another. <3 fans.
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message
Halo Fanatic 2006
Member


Joined: 17 Apr 2006
Posts: 139
Location: Azeroth, I can't find my way out!

PostPosted: Wed Jul 26, 2006 7:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow, he mentioned my name, thank god somebody knows me by now. I've been a fan of this series since Sangheili (I did a lot of reading to catch up on the series that night) since I love writing and reading stories about the Covenant more than humans. Sorry I haven't been around lately, I've been busy.
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message
mub
Member


Joined: 26 Jul 2006
Posts: 3

PostPosted: Sun Jul 30, 2006 12:01 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I've read all your stories and I must say, they are really impressive. Some themes you carry on later in the stories instead of forgetting them and keep his personality traits right. It leads to a really good, in-depth character.

Good job!
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message
STEEL RAIN
Member


Joined: 23 Jan 2006
Posts: 136
Location: WI, New York

PostPosted: Mon Jul 31, 2006 6:13 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Question.why most notably us?

Im sure there are others, but who can turn down somthing like this.
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail
Syotica
Moderator


Joined: 26 Sep 2004
Posts: 579
Location: Upper Peninsula, Michigan

PostPosted: Mon Jul 31, 2006 6:39 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Interesting.

I don't have the time to do a review right now, but I have one thing to point out.

Quote:
The grey-armored Sangheili raised his arm to shoulder level in salute.


Elites don't salute. Ever. EVER.
_________________
The Front Page ~ A new level of intellectual discussion.
http://tfp-forums.com
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message MSN Messenger
Azathoth
Member


Joined: 22 Nov 2005
Posts: 578
Location: South Africa. Fooken creatshas.

PostPosted: Mon Jul 31, 2006 12:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

STEEL RAIN, you three are on there because you've commented more regularly than anything else. Although I might have to include Syotica too if he keeps trying to make my stories better. Very Happy

Syotica: Yeah, I guess salute was a bad choice of words. Maybe "greeting" or "welcome" would have been better, because I wasn't trying to convey the whole traditional human "sir-yes-sir" salute. More like what the ancient Romans did. Or the Klingons. Razz
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message
Syotica
Moderator


Joined: 26 Sep 2004
Posts: 579
Location: Upper Peninsula, Michigan

PostPosted: Mon Jul 31, 2006 2:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Azathoth wrote:
Syotica: Yeah, I guess salute was a bad choice of words. Maybe "greeting" or "welcome" would have been better, because I wasn't trying to convey the whole traditional human "sir-yes-sir" salute. More like what the ancient Romans did. Or the Klingons. Razz


Ah, okay. I couldn't understand too well because of the "raised his arm" phrase. Razz

I'm actually liking your story, though. It's a basic Halo 2 plot, but your using good detail, etc. Your getting better at this. Smile
_________________
The Front Page ~ A new level of intellectual discussion.
http://tfp-forums.com
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message MSN Messenger
STEEL RAIN
Member


Joined: 23 Jan 2006
Posts: 136
Location: WI, New York

PostPosted: Mon Jul 31, 2006 3:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Steve have you read his earlyer fics?

I highly recomend them.
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail
Syotica
Moderator


Joined: 26 Sep 2004
Posts: 579
Location: Upper Peninsula, Michigan

PostPosted: Mon Jul 31, 2006 4:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

STEEL RAIN wrote:
Steve have you read his earlyer fics?

I highly recomend them.


I was browsing through them yesterday. Quite intrguing, but he needs to work on his Human stuff. The Covenant sounded too human in parts. Addicting, though.

This was one of my series.
_________________
The Front Page ~ A new level of intellectual discussion.
http://tfp-forums.com
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message MSN Messenger
Azathoth
Member


Joined: 22 Nov 2005
Posts: 578
Location: South Africa. Fooken creatshas.

PostPosted: Mon Jul 31, 2006 6:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Why, thank you. "Addicting" is everything I strive to be.

The Covies acting too human is the main problem in my writing. It's a bit annoying that I can't seem to get that right, because I prefer writing a Covenant POV.
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message
Display posts from previous:   
Post new topic   Reply to topic    HBO Fan Fiction Forum Index -> Fan Fiction Comments All times are GMT
Page 1 of 1

 
Jump to:  
You cannot post new topics in this forum
You cannot reply to topics in this forum
You cannot edit your posts in this forum
You cannot delete your posts in this forum
You cannot vote in polls in this forum


Powered by phpBB © 2001, 2005 phpBB Group