HBO Fan Fiction

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Halo-Battle of Heita II pt 2
Posted by Zealot (Pat Allen) (patallen79@hotmail.com)
18 June 2006, 10:18 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Zealot_Pat_A0618061018211.html

noobylam · Member Joined: 18 May 2006 Posts: 55 Location: compton

I see that you got a !@#! load of feedback in the last chapter. But I still gotta blame you for using the CODE poorly. Your formatting need some improvments as well. Though you've made some errors, the story line was pretty good! You kept your promise, but work on your formatting next time. Good luck with the next one! Very Happy

Oh yea, nice battle scenes, really well put together! I really enjoyed it! Very Happy

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