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Memories of a Dying Soldier - THE END

 
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 11:37 am    Post subject: Memories of a Dying Soldier - THE END Reply with quote

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Memories of a Dying Soldier - THE END
Posted by Spartan Elessar (spartan_elessar@yahoo.com)
9 June 2006, 9:29 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Spartan_Eles0609060929191.html
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 10, 2006 2:12 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Why is the beggining and ending so familiar? Is it meant to refer to something?
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PostPosted: Sun Jun 11, 2006 12:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I like it a lot. It dragged a bit in the middle, and I haven't read any of the other chapters, but it worked well enough as a stand-alone story. A lot of emotion in the end. Nice work.
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PostPosted: Tue Jun 13, 2006 4:44 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks for the review Nick Kang. I am really glad to hear that You liked my story. And I would really appreciate if you could read my whole series. This was my first Fanfic, let's hope its not my last Smile
http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?series=Memories+of+a+Dieing+Soldier


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Why is the beggining and ending so familiar? Is it meant to refer to something?


I wanted to give this story a Cinematic opening, so I took a small portion of the last chapter and submitted it at first. And then the "Real" story started from the First chapter, which eventually brought my readers to the Last and Final chapter to this series. The Prologue was just a "Teaser" to my series, if you know what I mean Chiajy. I hope you read the whole series, and i am glad you took your time to read and review it.
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PostPosted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 4:00 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Good ending to a great series. I saw some GPS errors such as not sticking to the same tense in a paragraph, but overall you did well. The ending gets a 9/10. Hope to see another story sometime soon.
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PostPosted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 6:10 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks for the Comment Spartan006. I am glad that i pleased my readers with my ending Smile
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