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PostPosted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 11:36 am    Post subject: Hope. part one Reply with quote

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Hope. part one
Posted by Badger (Badger)
6 June 2006, 10:17 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Badger0606061017451.html
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 10, 2006 12:30 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

the code would make it easier to read.

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 10, 2006 2:35 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

heya Hell, and I gotta agree a little bit. There was code, just not all of it.

Grammar and punctuation wise loose the single refrence quote markers and replace them with " " after all it's dialogue nothing something outta a book. Plot has promise, keep working on it and it might be a good idea to get a beta-reader/proof-reader.
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 10, 2006 4:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

It was pretty good. There was some coding, Helljumper. I like the sort of idea you're going for- post-Halo 3 seems to be a favorite for a lot of people. And it should be Aenaeid if you're going for the same word as the epic poem written by Virgil.
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