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Debo's Spartans
Posted by Debo (Major_Debo@hotmail.com)
19 May 2006, 2:50 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Debo0519060250491.html

Chiajy · Member Joined: 23 Mar 2006 Posts: 122 Location: Singapore

Good Story. However, please take note of grammer errors. Quite realistic the way you write that even a single spartan's death makes a mission FUBAR. Most people don't even think it's FUBAR when they lose 10 spartans or something.

Debo · Member Joined: 29 May 2006 Posts: 8 Location: Texas

Thanks, dude.

I think i'm going to add another part to the story. A smaller short story that covers what happened to Lieutenant Kelso. Also, maybe a another side-story of how Colonel Ackerson got the NOVA sent down to the surface w/o being suspicious from the loading crews and such.

That is, if I have the time.

Debo · Member Joined: 29 May 2006 Posts: 8 Location: Texas

For those still following this.. I'd created this for the cover of the story a few weeks before i released it. I did print off about ten copies and distributed them among students at my school. I got good reviews from everyone that said something about it to me.

so, here it is.

yeah, it's kind of not original but i worked hard on the story. and i'm not that experience with any of the good creative programs.

Thanks

Johny117 · Member Joined: 22 Feb 2006 Posts: 118

That was bloody brilliant. I loved it. Especially how the mission fails, I'm not sure why though.
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Debo · Member Joined: 29 May 2006 Posts: 8 Location: Texas

Well, you'll find out why the Spartans are being evacuated in the next chapter. I wasn't going to make another chapter, just leave it a cliffhanger, due to the fact that I didn't think people would like it. But, since I've got nothing except praise for it, then I will make both a prequal and a sequal to this story.

I had originally planned a prequal after I finished this because I wanted to recycle some of the characters: Winter in particular, since she died in the story.

I would also like to make a side-story to this about Sergeant Parker. I love a good tough Marine Sergeant, and I think I made him to fit the bill well, but that's MY opinion. I had Sgt. Stacker in mind when I was making him.

I also wanted to have a more Texan character in the game. Since, I AM a Texan, and except for the Alamo, Texas is never even mentioned in the Halo Universe.

I think you'll like the sequal and prequal. The sequal of course will be coming before the prequal. That way, everyone can find out what happened Lieutenant Kelso...

Thanks.