HBO Fan Fiction

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Poem Busters --1--
Posted by Alpha Halo Writer (wsandlin@yahoo.com)
15 May 2006, 2:58 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Alpha_Halo_W0515061458401.html

Chuckles · Posted: Mon May 22, 2006 8:33 am Post subject:

Hmmm. Waaaay too short, and you said nothing. That looked like a scribbled summary of about fifteen seconds of playing Halo with a friend. Yeah, I know that poems can take many forms, but whatever form they take, they still have to say something interesting.

I still think that you have a lot of potential for writing poems (based on a different submission) but you have got to push yourself harder than this.

C.T. Clown

Chiajy · Member Joined: 23 Mar 2006 Posts: 122 Location: Singapore

It's way too short!