HBO Fan Fiction

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stawars- halo-destroy all humans -daleks crossover chapter 1 all out war
Posted by 343 guilty spark (rowanclarke123@hotmail.com)
7 May 2006, 5:27 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=343_guilty_s0507061727441.html

Halo Fanatic 2006 · Posted: Sun May 14, 2006 6:49 pm Post subject:

That, my friend, was trash. (no offence)
I read the title, and heaved.
I skimmed through it, and puked.
Evil or Very Mad

Azathoth · Posted: Sun May 14, 2006 7:25 pm Post subject:

I apologize. Was that actually supposed to be a story? It was almost literally unreadable. I am not trying to show cruelty, but if you're going to write a story, write a story, not a hundred and fifty unintelligible words.

SYSTEM · Posted: Sun May 14, 2006 8:38 pm Post subject:

Let's just say I'll turn a blind eye to this thread and have a much better day in the long run.

You didn't follow the guidelines, kid, so don't come crying to the mods if suddenly your comments page fills with flames, I haven't got time for it.

If you're willing to stick around and improve, welcome, we'd like to see you improve. Otherwise, run along.

- Dave.
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Chiajy · Member Joined: 23 Mar 2006 Posts: 122 Location: Singapore

I knew this was a bad day....I was APPREHENSIVE when I came to your story....

Matthiasthe14th · Posted: Mon May 15, 2006 11:27 am Post subject:

Oh my gosh... There were only three periods in the entire unit of words! Not even a single quotation mark, even though one can tell there is dialogue. 0/10

Mainevent · Posted: Mon May 15, 2006 11:42 am Post subject:

Can I sue for retinal scarring?

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

Sure. And I'll be your lawyer.

Well, 343 guilty spark... This wasn't very well written, as you can tell from the replies you have gotten thus far. If you choose to post here again, please at least write with proper sentenses and paragraph correctly. When you write fiction for an audience, you have to keep their wellbeing in mind.

When you post again, in better format and quality, I'll make sure to drop you a good comment.
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CoLd BlooDed · Posted: Mon May 15, 2006 11:25 pm Post subject:

I never, ever say this, but.

Learn to freakin' write. Twenty bucks says you won't be commenting in this thread - forty bucks says you don't even care.

If you do care about your own writing, drop us a line - we're willing to help.

Matthiasthe14th · Posted: Tue May 16, 2006 5:14 am Post subject:

I still think we need to file a class-action law suit. Think of how many eyes have been damaged here...

Commander Demitri Wolf · Posted: Tue May 16, 2006 6:17 am Post subject:

Chiajy · Member Joined: 23 Mar 2006 Posts: 122 Location: Singapore

I wasn't ridiculing....after reading what everybody posted, I was laughing my pants off..That 20/40 bucks thing was funny.....

Sorry

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

Alright.

Unless you have constructive criticism towards this writing, or are the author, don't be posting here anymore. This has enough stuff on it at this point. So, if you post and don't adhear to the above, you may well see your post deleted and/or the thread locked.

Thanks.
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bowog the grunt · Member Joined: 16 Jun 2006 Posts: 51 Location: the TARDIS

man i love, starwars,halo, doctor who(especially!), but all together? insane!!!! it was horrible! but what do i know i wrote tango company! :lol:

nice to meet you rose, run for your life! :D

Marine Corps 117 · Posted: Tue Jun 27, 2006 6:55 pm Post subject:

I saw it as an exaggerated parody of bad fanfiction. I thought it was funny, good job. Smile