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PostPosted: Sun May 14, 2006 4:54 pm    Post subject: stawars- halo-destroy all humans -daleks crossover chapter Reply with quote

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stawars- halo-destroy all humans -daleks crossover chapter 1 all out war
Posted by 343 guilty spark (rowanclarke123@hotmail.com)
7 May 2006, 5:27 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=343_guilty_s0507061727441.html
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PostPosted: Sun May 14, 2006 6:49 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

That, my friend, was trash. (no offence)
I read the title, and heaved.
I skimmed through it, and puked.
Evil or Very Mad
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PostPosted: Sun May 14, 2006 7:25 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I apologize. Was that actually supposed to be a story? It was almost literally unreadable. I am not trying to show cruelty, but if you're going to write a story, write a story, not a hundred and fifty unintelligible words.
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PostPosted: Sun May 14, 2006 8:38 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Let's just say I'll turn a blind eye to this thread and have a much better day in the long run.

You didn't follow the guidelines, kid, so don't come crying to the mods if suddenly your comments page fills with flames, I haven't got time for it.

If you're willing to stick around and improve, welcome, we'd like to see you improve. Otherwise, run along.

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PostPosted: Mon May 15, 2006 6:48 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I knew this was a bad day....I was APPREHENSIVE when I came to your story....
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PostPosted: Mon May 15, 2006 11:27 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oh my gosh... There were only three periods in the entire unit of words! Not even a single quotation mark, even though one can tell there is dialogue. 0/10
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PostPosted: Mon May 15, 2006 11:42 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Can I sue for retinal scarring?
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PostPosted: Mon May 15, 2006 4:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Sure. And I'll be your lawyer.


Well, 343 guilty spark... This wasn't very well written, as you can tell from the replies you have gotten thus far. If you choose to post here again, please at least write with proper sentenses and paragraph correctly. When you write fiction for an audience, you have to keep their wellbeing in mind.

When you post again, in better format and quality, I'll make sure to drop you a good comment.
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PostPosted: Mon May 15, 2006 11:25 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I never, ever say this, but.

Learn to freakin' write. Twenty bucks says you won't be commenting in this thread - forty bucks says you don't even care.

If you do care about your own writing, drop us a line - we're willing to help.
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2006 5:14 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I still think we need to file a class-action law suit. Think of how many eyes have been damaged here...
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2006 6:17 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Matthiasthe14th wrote:
I still think we need to file a class-action law suit. Think of how many eyes have been damaged here...

OKAY! We get it, goddamn it; it sucked something terrible! But thats all everyone has said, either post something constructive or agree with everyone else by letting this thread fade away. Oh, and to the authour, the only reason you have comments is cause of the sheer horror of the story and of the title (note: Star Wars, not stawars); work, work, work on improving your writing, cause as it stands now, people will only comment to laugh and ridicule.
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PostPosted: Wed May 17, 2006 12:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I wasn't ridiculing....after reading what everybody posted, I was laughing my pants off..That 20/40 bucks thing was funny.....


Sorry


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PostPosted: Wed May 17, 2006 12:59 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Alright.

Unless you have constructive criticism towards this writing, or are the author, don't be posting here anymore. This has enough stuff on it at this point. So, if you post and don't adhear to the above, you may well see your post deleted and/or the thread locked.

Thanks.
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PostPosted: Tue Jun 27, 2006 5:17 pm    Post subject: ugh!!! Reply with quote

man i love, starwars,halo, doctor who(especially!), but all together? insane!!!! it was horrible! but what do i know i wrote tango company! :lol:




nice to meet you rose, run for your life! :D
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PostPosted: Tue Jun 27, 2006 6:55 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I saw it as an exaggerated parody of bad fanfiction. I thought it was funny, good job. Smile
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