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Glass and Steel, Part 12.5 - The End of Suffering
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 11:15 am    Post subject: Glass and Steel, Part 12.5 - The End of Suffering Reply with quote

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Glass and Steel, Part 12.5 - The End of Suffering
Posted by Random 14-Year-Old (i-rule-2008@comcast.net)
31 March 2006, 6:26 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Random_14-Ye0331060626541.html
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 3:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

OK, that's just too much. There is a limit to how disjointed and chaotic a story can be, and still remain coherent. It's fairly obvious that you didn't intend for this to end happily, but ending coherently is definetly a good thinga, and you put the story through so many changes, so fast, that I could barely track them.

On a more particular note, "Neural Brainwaves" is kind of redundant, saying neural pathways, or perhaps detailing some sort of integration into one's synapses, but neural brainwaves doesn't really work all that well.

Curious though, how did Howard get aboard the Covenant ship?
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 7:12 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Shocked Whoa...that was just insane, man. I've read the rest of your series and the poems that went with it, but that was just WAY to crazy. I hope that's not the end, because I just had trouble following the story at some points. Hopefully you can clear that all up.

But it was still a good installment Smile
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 10:54 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I pray this isn't the end for my favorite hero! Oh dear oh dear, is howard a spy? Does the A.I. eventually ally Ren? How did he get the armor? How can he walk, I can't help asking this, if his feet fell off? This is so incoherent! Ahhhh! I wanna see the next installment! Razz
9/10 Still nice, but uh keep it coherent.
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 11:47 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I wonder if anyone will find the clue....

Or if I should give out a hint.

I am such a horrible person.
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PostPosted: Sat Apr 01, 2006 3:05 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

DON'T GIVE OUT A HINT. DON'T F***ING GIVE ONE OUT.

Sorry about that. I liked this one. It was really bizarre: he nearly dies, he nearly dies again, and - hopefully - he nearly dies again, instead of dying outright. Uber cool!

It's not the end, my friends. Of course not. Can't you tell?
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PostPosted: Sat Apr 01, 2006 4:28 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thank you, Dagorath. Hehe.

I would just like to point out the most IMPORTANT part of this chapter.

The gibberish in the middle - the part in italics. Most important. I can't tell you why right now. But really.. it's most important. Seriously, goddamnit.

Anyone who looks close enough can see it.

Confused

Razz
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PostPosted: Sat Apr 01, 2006 2:37 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

AHA! I GET IT! I'm not going to say what it is, though.

Razz
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 02, 2006 4:03 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well, here it is anyway. hehe Smile

Heart Embraced Ren, Evil Begat Evil, Greatness In Nothingness, Saving Ariana, Personal Rampages, Instilled Love, Facts, Opinions, Oppressing LiesóEnraged, Ren Yells.

Here Begins April Foolery

Yep. It's sorta nifty. I'm a jerk. And I take April Fools a little bit seriously.

And don't worry, things will be all back to normal in Part 13. And when I say "normal" I do mean coherent. I promise. Wink
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 02, 2006 5:17 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

LOL! I thought it was something interesting about the story. Turns out it's something interesting about April Fools.
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 02, 2006 7:37 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Come on man pleas don't end the story here. I look forward to your story evertime a new update comes. If your going to end it here do us a fvor and right more stories ok becasue i will miss this one. Sad
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 02, 2006 8:21 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Dont worry, dont worry, it was just an April Fools joke.. most of this chapter is random BS that is NOT part of the real storyline. Ren never got special armor, he never met an AI named Purity, and he never died in an explosion.

Heh. Uhhh I never meant to make anyone sad with this joke -- but then again, what was I expecting?

Razz

Well. Anyone who liked this chapter anyway, thanks, I guess. And if you didnt like it, well, I deeply feel your pain.

Happy April Fools Day, everyone. And dont forget to spring forward your clocks. Wink
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 02, 2006 8:24 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

And here I thought the hint was in the title (part 12.5).
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 02, 2006 1:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

OK, dude, I think you need to explain this... So everything after "Evil begot Ren" is just plain fiction?

Oh, I sound like a n00b now. Sorry.
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 02, 2006 7:52 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Haha, youre right, Steel Rain. I was hoping that seeing "Part 12.5" would throw off a red flag and prepare someone for what would be an abnormal chapter....

Heh.. yeah.. pretty much, Dagorath. I dont know if anyone else has ever written an April Fools story, but I figured what the hell. I might have this be a "dream" or something and have Ren wake up from it at the beginning of Part 13.

Yep.. I guess this chapter is what they would call "not canon" ?

I dont know. Ehhh... yeah. Pretend it never happened? Smile
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