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Legacy II: Big Green, Little Green, Cut By Lightsabers
Posted by SeverianofUrth (severn117@gmail.com)
17 March 2006, 2:27 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=SeverianofUr0317061427311.html

Spartan006 · Posted: Mon Mar 20, 2006 7:27 pm Post subject:

Nice story. Didn't really see any grammerical errors. Your story gets a 7/10 from me. Please don't kill the Chief, man, that would be horrible.
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Sebasman · Member Joined: 23 Jul 2005 Posts: 38 Location: Gilbert, AZ

this is a great story, and i have to agree with Spartan006. The only thing is, cant Yoda just force-hold the female jedi??? that would make perfect sense. or, he could mind-trick her.

Spartan006 · Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 5:19 pm Post subject:

Yoda probably could use the force on her. Maybe he is waiting to see if the Master Chief is good enough to stay alive by himself, then if he isn't he would use the force on her.
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(ENS) Rabid_Gallagher · Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 6:14 pm Post subject:

I'm a bit confused on the era we're in this story. Is this pre-Episode? Or is this the Yoda=Jedi Knight series? I don't recall seeing the words Master Yoda in your story.
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Spartan006 · Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 7:01 pm Post subject:

I read through it again, and it seems to me that it is the Yoda=Jedi Knight series, but I'm not 100% sure Confused

. Maybe Sev can tell us.
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SeverianofUrth · Posted: Thu Mar 23, 2006 7:20 pm Post subject:

Yoda, from Jedi Knights.

Thanks, guys. Part Three will be up soon, perhaps in a week or two.

what I find odd is that this story seems to have gotten the most 'hits,' but the least reviews. Where did I go wrong?

thedarkfire · Posted: Wed Mar 29, 2006 6:18 am Post subject:

Alright, just read both and I officially find this to be a good read. I'll be looking for part 3 Sev. Wink

Radont · Member Joined: 21 Jul 2005 Posts: 36 Location: Michigan

Great job again, I'm really liking this one. The only thing I saw that could be changed was you used 'a' a lot when you should have used 'an'. Other than that it was perfect and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

Guardian · Posted: Fri Apr 07, 2006 11:35 pm Post subject:

You gave Sev a 7/10 for his story?

Shocked

Heresy!

Nice Story Sev, I don't wanna type up the details of what you messed up on if you did mess up on and on which parts were awesome, I'm betting you can read minds. So i'll leave it up to you to read my mind on the awesomeness of your story.

bowog the grunt · Member Joined: 16 Jun 2006 Posts: 51 Location: the TARDIS

usually i don't like crossovers because they destroy the charactors, well... charactor! but this was cool! i loved i hope you make more!

(hint.) maybe you could write a story about, halo meets doctor who,
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