HBO Fan Fiction

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Biological Storage: Four
Posted by Dagorath (hoyinshan@gmail.com)
17 March 2006, 11:58 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Dagorath0317061158341.html

Random 14-Year-Old · Member Joined: 20 Jan 2005 Posts: 81 Location: California

sweet i wanna read this as soon as my parents let me use my computer again and i dont have to use my psp to get on the internet

Sterfrye36 · Posted: Tue Mar 21, 2006 3:41 am Post subject:

You're typing that with a PSP? Wow, you're brave. Confused

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Spartan006 · Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 8:20 pm Post subject:

Hmm...Halo and the Matrix. This is a pretty good story you have going here. Excelent Cool

. 9/10
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Random 14-Year-Old · Member Joined: 20 Jan 2005 Posts: 81 Location: California

Alrighty then.

It's pretty good. I was a little surprised to see John snap and begin to run - he's a Spartan, he's supposed to have it together. But I guess his old age is getting to him, and this virtual craziness was too much for him.

The whole Johnson / Keyes thing kinda left something missing for me. What does John think about this rip in the fabric of space? And Johnson and Keyes saved him just to let him die in the street?

But yeah, cranky criticisms aside, this was good and I'm looking forward to seeing this whole thing play out.

Syotica_disabled · Posted: Thu Mar 23, 2006 5:31 am Post subject:

Looking good man.

SeverianofUrth · Posted: Thu Mar 23, 2006 7:21 pm Post subject:

Well, this is certainly developing. Razz

Great job, man.

Dagorath · Posted: Fri Mar 24, 2006 11:25 pm Post subject:

Hmm. Good point, my Random friend. The truth is, John is very entrenched in his own reality. He doesn't even like fighting in space, even. So imagine, your whole world just looks wrong. Your Geo textbook looks like it's made of plastic. The people you meet look like projections. How would you feel? Then, I dunno, your little sister gets shot. He's a Spartan, I know, but everyone's got a breaking point.

Good point about the rip though. John is bewildered and absolutely freaked out Very Happy

But I guess I'll have to do something about Keyes/Johnson. Perhaps it's their doppelgangers... No. It's them.