HBO Fan Fiction

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This Blue Rock/Turned to Black
Posted by Solidus Snake (Megadeth18_Polaris@yahoo.com)
25 February 2006, 9:24 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Solidus_Snak0225062124431.html

Solidus Snake · Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2006 1:19 am Post subject:

Well, hope y'all like it, and yeah there are some mistakes in there, sorry about that.

I'm gonna try and start working on Intro the Fray of Insanity again but its will frustrating because I had second part started and I lost everything in a hardrive crash. Confused

CoLd BlooDed · Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2006 2:10 am Post subject:

Very nice, I liked it. The reference to Halo is vague enough to make this poem meaningful instead of fake or cheesy, yet solid enough to make it so we know what you're talking about.

Some flow issues, some memorable stanzas. Overall, pretty good job.

SYSTEM · Posted: Sat Mar 04, 2006 3:10 am Post subject:

My favourite lines were the first and the last lines.

Paint a great picture in your head.

Great, man, I've really enjoyed this poem! Keep it up, Sol! And good luck with the band!

- Dave.
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Solidus Snake · Posted: Sun Mar 05, 2006 12:58 am Post subject:

Thank you two, very much.

And I figured someone would like the last last.

\m/ Twisted Evil

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