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PostPosted: Tue Oct 05, 2004 2:37 pm    Post subject: The Captain Reply with quote

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Posted by Solidus Snake (chikornx@aol.com)
3 October 2004, 9:05 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=solidus_snak.1003042105011.html
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PostPosted: Tue Oct 05, 2004 11:09 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Damn no readers?
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PostPosted: Tue Oct 05, 2004 11:16 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

There was some verb tense switching, and some passages that could have been better, but overall, it was a decent job.
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PostPosted: Wed Oct 06, 2004 12:03 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thank you. I've written this a long time back and posted it on HFC or whatever and it didn't get as good of a review as I thought and I left it to sit since now.
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 17, 2004 1:06 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

It was good
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 17, 2004 1:49 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ah, after several days of wading through the swamp of eternal Fix (my word for n00b Fics), I have finally found a poem worth reading, by a poet known to me and others. My day is now complete.
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 17, 2004 11:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oho. This is good - I mean, Solidus does Magical Realism quite well, don't you think?

- Dave.
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 18, 2004 1:51 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Magical Realism? Well, I just saw a poem, personally, but...

Pretty good. I have a vague recolection of reading this somewhere... not sure though. Maybe I'm imagining it.

When you gonna post another actual story, Solidus?
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 18, 2004 5:11 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Sorry, MCC. English development Jargon. Magical Realism is when you describe something ordinary and everyday with such 'surreal' adjectives and such that you actually portray a realistic situation as 'heavenly'

If you want a GREAT example of this, and symbolism, read "The Bucket Rider" - By Franz Kafka. It's only three pages long, but it's well worth it. Find it in "Elements of English (Ontario Edition) - Grade 11."

Solidus does Magical Realism quite well. His descriptions evidently act on the moment.

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