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Remember Me, Earth
Posted by Dagorath (hoyinshan@gmail.com)
10 February 2006, 2:23 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Dagorath0210061423391.html

Nick Kang · Posted: Sat Feb 11, 2006 4:31 pm Post subject:

I've never read (or even heard of) the poem that this is based off of, but it was still good nonetheless. There were some flow issues (not sure if those were in the original poem or not), but the meaning was driven across. Nice work.
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Dagorath · Posted: Sun Feb 12, 2006 2:08 am Post subject:

I shouldn't have copied it. We were doing it for English Lit. GCSE, and I thought it was good....

I prefer My Next Project (MNP).

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

The poem was not a bad one. However, as Mister Kang there so pointed out, the flow was a bit lacking. The meaning there was very nice, and the word choice -- for meaning -- was not bad. However, the smoothness of the read did not match up, which, especially in the case of a poem, takes substantially away from the over all feel of things.

Watch that. Whenever you take a base poem and change it around for your own uses, make sure those changes fit.
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SeverianofUrth · Posted: Fri Feb 17, 2006 7:13 pm Post subject:

I thought this was nice; not terribly creative, but nice nonetheless especially if you've never read the original poem (like me). I think the flow was alright; the rhythm doesn't have to have this sing-song cadence for it to flow.

Dagorath · Posted: Sat Feb 18, 2006 9:58 am Post subject:

Rossetti used Iambic Pentameter and an Italian sort of sonnet form (she deviated at the end; we wen tover the implications of this connotation for ages in class).