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Spectre: The Hydorian Campaigns: Prologue: Part 2: The Beginnings of a Platoon
Posted by (ENS) Rabid_Gallagher (rabid_masterchief@hotmail.com)
10 February 2006, 12:50 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=ENS_Rabid_Ga0210060050301.html

(ENS) Rabid_Gallagher · Posted: Sat Feb 11, 2006 9:55 pm Post subject:

So guys, what do you think? I was trying to convey the team first, in the first of a three part prologue, before I actually start the series. Is my style okay?
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thedarkfire · Posted: Sat Feb 11, 2006 9:56 pm Post subject:

Just finished reading both part one and two.

This is some pretty good stuff you got yourself here. I did notice some minor flaws in flow and punctuation, but other than that, it's all good.

Keep writing mate.

sir_diesalot · Member Joined: 16 Feb 2006 Posts: 1

Hey, good story. Great grammer and nice characters Wink

keep it up

RogueFox · Member Joined: 31 Jul 2004 Posts: 12

Hey, just stopping in to thank you for the critique.

I would appreciate any comments and ideas you have for my work in the future. They are a great assistance to me as a writer.

Imperorator_Jon · Member Joined: 29 Oct 2005 Posts: 97 Location: Moop?

Nice job, I mostly skimmed though, I say it deserves a good 9 out of 10! Smile