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The Mother of All Battles: Surprise

 
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 13, 2006 4:15 pm    Post subject: The Mother of All Battles: Surprise Reply with quote

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The Mother of All Battles: Surprise
Posted by Andres (andres_vera2000@yahoo.com)
11 January 2006, 5:35 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Andres0111060535121.html
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PostPosted: Mon Jan 16, 2006 6:39 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Whoa, you forgot to use indents, Andres. Next time, space them out with block paragraphs or simply use indents.

You wrote:
"SITREP"


There we go. I was reading and reading, and then finally got to this. Firm proof that this was written by you. Smile

You wrote:
Two heavy, fixed Magnetic Accelerator Cannons, three light, mobile MACs and thirty 10m conventional howitzers; she was, by all means, a Battleship.


10 meter howitzers? That's huge, too huge.

You wrote:
The 550 Kiloton Nuke had only a layer of tungsten to protect it and it had the power to destroy an entire Covenant carrier and its surroundings.


Okay, as far as I know, the reason they don't put nukes on a MAC round is because of the possibility (or reality) of premature explosion (that is, detonation prior to penetration of the shields), and as we know, Covenant shields can withstand widespread explosions, even from a nuke, but not precise, concentrated rounds (like the standard MAC round). So, in essence, I think the only feasible way for this to work is for the nuke to be positioned at the very rear of the round, and the round itself modified with far more matter at the front so that in the nanosecond from penetration to inevitable explosion, the shields are down (or disappated enough) for the nuke to do serious damage.

MCC or someone who actually cared to read the books could offer a better point here, though.

Overall, it was done well. As always, I love your technical side of things, which really does compliment the story, but there were a high number of GPS errors; make sure you PR a lot more. Also, you must absolutely format your story next time.

Keep it up, Andres.

-Russ
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PostPosted: Tue Jan 17, 2006 11:41 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

russ687 wrote:
10 meter howitzers? That's huge, too huge.


Thought so too until I readed again the Fall of Reach. 300ts a MAC round..

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Okay, as far as I know, the reason they don't put nukes on a MAC round is because of the possibility (or reality) of premature explosion (that is, detonation prior to penetration of the shields)

I was thinking of more of a "shaped charge."
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PostPosted: Wed Jan 18, 2006 7:47 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

For personal reasons I am putting this one on hold for a while.
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