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PostPosted: Fri Jan 06, 2006 2:57 pm    Post subject: Jade Armored Kings Reply with quote

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Jade Armored Kings
Posted by Mainevent
4 January 2006, 11:02 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Mainevent0104062302351.html
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 06, 2006 5:07 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow. Powerful.

Will this continue or was it one time thing?

Whatever you choose to do it is good to see something from you.

Very, very, nice. Good job Main.

Caleb
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 06, 2006 9:37 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

It keeps going with Terminals.
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 06, 2006 9:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

If there's one thing I love, it's a strong beginning to a good story. I especially loved the interaction between John and Linda, that went very well. Go get published, seriously.
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PostPosted: Sat Jan 07, 2006 1:48 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I like the way you write Main, it's interesting and really draws the reader in, no complaints from me.
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PostPosted: Sat Jan 07, 2006 5:16 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

One thing I really enjoy is catching references in people's stories. (As if the story weren't painfully obvious about who the boys were) It now appears as though you're doing it, too, et tu Brute?

Lovin' it. Keep it up! Cool
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 13, 2006 8:30 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks guys for your comments.
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PostPosted: Sat Jan 14, 2006 9:56 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey Main! Sorry I read this late. Nice chapter, liked the conflict between John and Linda (reduced sexual drive....?) and Fred got quite fleshed out too. Gives a different facet to just the faceless soldiers. Nice how you tied in the Jade Armored King story with the rest as well.

But does that mean Patterson's the pendant?
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PostPosted: Sat Jan 14, 2006 5:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

The pendant is an object that will give the wearer powers. Patterson is just the first boy king who wants the pendant. It'll play out later in the chapters.
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