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Waking the Dead (part eight): Dead by Dawn
Posted by Chuckles
30 December 2005, 12:11 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Chuckles1230050011571.html

(Na)Marl · Posted: Fri Dec 30, 2005 5:41 pm Post subject:

--Great read, Chuckles, especially while listening to Revenga. Does this mean you're gonna force us to wait for another? Razz

HELSING · Member Joined: 21 Jan 2005 Posts: 151

A delicious piece of literature. Thank you for putting in the scriptural references in a fashion that was neither mocking or patronizing. I can tell you've done your research. Not many people know about those parts of the Bible, other than Goliath.

The fight scene was excellently done, one thing though; I highly doubt any sort of crowd would stick around to not only watch that kind of spectacle, but also place bets and cheer. It seems much more likely that they would all be running or hiding in their homes. The town had no prior experience with the Spartans as you said, they wouldn't know who was good or evil, if there was a difference, or why their own champions were killing each other.

keep 'em coming

Caleb the Jackal · Posted: Fri Dec 30, 2005 11:42 pm Post subject:

Chuckles, I don't know if you know this or not but man.... This was awesome!!!!!!!!

The way Caleb fought! WOW!

Chuck.

I give this one two thumbs up~!~

Caleb

Surprised

Commander Demitri Wolf · Posted: Sat Dec 31, 2005 12:12 am Post subject:

Interesting Chuck, The Fallen is something I've been focusing on for my newest piece, and I must say that the way you apply it to giants is quite different, but very intriquing at the same time. I have missed most of this series so I won't know how it ties into thestory, but rest assured ( Very Happy

) I'll read it soon enough.

Triad · Member Joined: 17 Mar 2005 Posts: 20

Wow. just...just.....wow.

That was the first impression, and the second impression wasn't much different. I'm looking forward to the conclusion of this already epic story. Good luck in tying up all the loose plotlines!

Triad

Johnson: "Why did you bash that Elite's face into the ground, Chief?"
117: "To give him a headstart to hell."

CoLd BlooDed · Posted: Sat Dec 31, 2005 9:33 pm Post subject:

This is definately on my 'to-read' list, Chuckles, you've got my word. I'm just trying to figure out what I'm doing for New Years. Wink

thedarkfire · Posted: Sat Dec 31, 2005 10:45 pm Post subject:

Took you long enough.

That aside, bitchin' story!

Chuckles · Posted: Sat Dec 31, 2005 11:17 pm Post subject:

thedarkfire wrote:

me · Posted: Sun Jan 01, 2006 6:23 am Post subject: waking the dead

I loved it I dont know what to say Im speechless

...ok as much as I liked it I noticed one thing 16th paragraph second section you put down spinner it shoulda been spinning

...I still loved it great job

thedarkfire · Posted: Sun Jan 01, 2006 8:17 am Post subject:

Give your newborn a hug from me will ya Chuck? Smile

HELSING · Member Joined: 21 Jan 2005 Posts: 151

Congratulations Chuckles! What did the Clown name his kid?

Chuckles · Posted: Mon Jan 02, 2006 11:17 pm Post subject:

HELSING wrote:

SYSTEM · Posted: Tue Jan 03, 2006 1:05 am Post subject:

Aaaaah... Basking in the glory of Chuck's awesome, if not somewhat spooky style.

Man, the description of the bones creeps me out; because a while ago, I was studying a little bit about critical thinking on finding out about ancient civilisations and researching ancient people like Neanderthals, Cro-Magnon, etc, and how early, primitive man differed from us. They say the northern skeletons had deep cavities on their teeth, scars you could say, from a diet primarily consisting of berries and nuts, whereas the southerners had flatter teeth, probably better suited for fruit.

Getting on, the death scene, as expected. Horrific, brutal, and full of harsh, horrid description. Shiver me timbers, mateys, the reaper comes a-callin'.

Gotta say, I love Chuck's arrays of styles "He had stayed alive for too long." and "his smile was halfway down his throat." those sarcastic, biting lines that just prove to make this extra-special. Extra-Chuckles. I love those parts the best out of all.

As for mechanical errors, since I know you know what you're doing, they will be discounted and ignored.

Awesome, man. A definete

- Bloody Hell Yeah!

- Dave.
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Torr · Member Joined: 10 Oct 2005 Posts: 14

Once again, amazing work, Chuckles.

I enjoy reading your stories as much as I enjoy a good book, and you continue to inspire me each day, even in the World of Warcraft movie I'm helping make, I am constantly trying to get the "feel" that your stories have. The awesome, spooky feel, just like Dave mentioned.

Chuckles, Simjanes, MiNeS, Lexicus, Caleb, all of them such GOOD characters. I literally CANT wait for the next week, I see that Sim-Caleb and Sim-Chuckles fight in my head constantly.

Btw, I'm curious, I know Simjanes is a guy you play Halo with, but how do you pronounce that. I made my friend read this series (he thinks fan fics are geeky) and now he is in love with it too and we argue about how to pronounce Simjanes.

I say Sim-AYNES.
He says Sim-ON-AYs.

We both think the J is silent, because SimJanes sounds kind of weird. But we could be wrong.

Wanna help us out? Very Happy