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A Marine's Tale, Chapter 1:

 
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 23, 2005 2:49 pm    Post subject: A Marine's Tale, Chapter 1: Reply with quote

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A Marine's Tale, Chapter 1:
Posted by The Meep (The_Meep)
20 December 2005, 3:04 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=The_Meep1220050304441.html
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 24, 2005 2:38 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

It was good. You separated the paragraphs, but you still need the Code. You did a nice job melding it with the original game.

However, for a story that placed such large emphasis on combat, I expected it to have better fighting. For the most part, it was head-on, nice and straightforward, but you didn't quite describe it too well.

The actions of the Marines seemed pretty realistic. That's a good thing.
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