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Glass and Steel, Part 9 - To Add Insult to Injury

 
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 09, 2005 5:45 pm    Post subject: Glass and Steel, Part 9 - To Add Insult to Injury Reply with quote

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Glass and Steel, Part 9 - To Add Insult to Injury
Posted by Random 14-Year-Old (i-rule-2008@comcast.net)
8 December 2005, 3:50 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Random_14-Ye1208050350261.html
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 09, 2005 9:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I think your series is really good and this story was good and I can't wait for the next one. I would also, if its ok, like to ask you for some advise on how to write a good story. You could send me a message, if you want, here or you could E-mail me at (Mirajaco15@yahoo.com)or at my Myspace which is also Mirajaco15 just do a search for me. If not thanks for your time anyways.
and again your stories are really awesome.
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 09, 2005 9:57 pm    Post subject: Re: Glass and Steel, Part 9 - To Add Insult to Injury Reply with quote

i like your stories alot i thought that you stopped writing for this series i was so mad, but i see that you didn't so that's cool can't wait till the next one.
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 10, 2005 8:16 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yeah..... sort of put it on hiatus for awhile, I was getting caught up in other life-related crap and Glass and Steel almost went the path of The Great Journey -- but I refused to let this story just sit, and I AM going to finish it. Glad you liked this chapter, though, I was worried my writing style had changed for the worse after--what, months?--of English essays and no Halo fanfic in between.

And Elite097, no prob, I'll look for you on Myspace. Expect a friend request from Sean P.i.C. [LPU]. Razz
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 11, 2005 4:31 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

The only major change I picked up is it's shortness. Sadly, it subtracted from the story. It was a good chapter, but, I felt like it was too short. Hey, this is a great series and I'm glad your writing more. Good job, 9.0/10.
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 11, 2005 6:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Haven't seen R14YO for ages. Or is it R15YO now...
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 11, 2005 8:14 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yeah, I sort of anticipated this chapter being short, because 1) I wanted to just get something, anything out there to end my dry spell, and 2) It's sort of a filler chapter, so that I'll be able to have exactly ten chapters in the story before the plot takes a sudden shift that I've been hinting at. Even numbers make me happy. Cool

And it's true that I've turned 15 but I realize now that age isn't a wise thing to put in a username because I can't change my username without creating an entirely fresh slate and leaving all my previous works behind...

R14YO, R15YO, RYO, doesn't matter to me.
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 11, 2005 11:59 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Saw a few small mistakes scattered about. And we all know that's never a good thing to have littering your story. Take the time to weed those out. You know it makes a difference.


Snap. It was about... three-fifths of the way through this when the plot I know before this chapter popped into place. I do remember that car crash. It's nice to recall such things... And, boy, has that been a while.


As for the brevity of this chapter... it was rather short. Didn't move very far from when he woke to the ending. However, there was some important information presented. Just in a pretty short length of writing. I like having a fair amount of material to read; and while this wasn't all too long, it was still pleasant to go through.


Overall, this was good. I enjoyed it, especially when I found I remembered the last chapter. Keep working. Smooth out those kinks.
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