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An Unggoy Life: Chapter 30: Battle for Seattle
Posted by CrazyGrunt (thomas-hoskins@comcast.net)
16 October 2005, 6:24 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=CrazyGrunt1016051824311.html

Darth Evilness · Member Joined: 18 Oct 2005 Posts: 1

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pieman · Posted: Wed Oct 19, 2005 1:57 am Post subject:

I stopped reading about the second sentence.

Seattle is not the capital of Washington state.

If this was a good fic, then I'm sorry for not reading it. You MUST research your topics before writing about them. The capital is Olympia for future refrence.

Sorry for the harshness, if this is your 30th chapter, than wow. You've put a lot of effort and time into this. Keep it up, just remember your facts.

Guardian · Posted: Wed Oct 19, 2005 2:55 am Post subject:

What pieman said and you need to spell out your numbers. If you just put 5 and 365. It looks bad, its decent over all. 343 GS is f-ing outta character.

CrazyGrunt · Posted: Wed Oct 19, 2005 6:17 am Post subject:

Sorry about Guilty Spark being out of character. Oh, and pieman, I live in Washington state. I know that Olympia is the current capital, but we don't know what the capital of Washington state is five hundred years from now. Just trying to be imaginative here.

One more thing. Welcome Darth Eviliness