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The Codex: Chapter 1 - The Gathering Storm

 
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PostPosted: Fri Oct 07, 2005 7:06 pm    Post subject: The Codex: Chapter 1 - The Gathering Storm Reply with quote

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The Codex: Chapter 1 - The Gathering Storm
Posted by Dagorath (hoyinshan@gmail.com)
5 October 2005, 2:00 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Dagorath1005051400431.html
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PostPosted: Fri Oct 07, 2005 9:18 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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“But Praetor,” came Truth’s voice. “Do not fail us again.”
And the Elite was silent.


No offense, but that line is waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay too overused. Everything else was really good otherwise.
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 08, 2005 2:26 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

--I only saw that line once. What do you mean, overused? But anyway, I'm a pretty good Codex fan. One thing you'll find is that the episodes get better as they progress. The voice acting is basic at first, but it does clear up a bit.
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 08, 2005 3:17 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

He used the Code, yay! Nice story, don't worry about the AN's at the bottom.
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 08, 2005 5:14 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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“But Praetor,” came Truth’s voice. “Do not fail us again.”


That came from the episode itself. I didn't write it.

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And the Elite was silent.


Actually, I remember I myself used something similar in Chapter 18:

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And the soldiers before him were silent.


Maybe Shadow was right after all.
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 08, 2005 5:36 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

--Oh, hehe. Smile Hey, if you need someone to proofread, I'd be delighted.
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