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An Unggoy Life: Chapter 26: Orks Never Listen

 
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 23, 2005 3:07 pm    Post subject: An Unggoy Life: Chapter 26: Orks Never Listen Reply with quote
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An Unggoy Life: Chapter 26: Orks Never Listen
Posted by CrazyGrunt (thomas-hoskins@comcast.net)
21 September 2005, 2:09 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=CrazyGrunt0921050209041.html
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 23, 2005 4:41 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
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"Die infidels!" Truth cried, and the Energy Cannon in his hoverchair at the three of them.


His energy cannon did what? Fire? Say Hello?

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Suddenly, Half-Jaw had Grievous' right hand occupied with deflecting Half-Jaw's Energy Sword, and the Arbiter had his left hand occupied with parrying the Arbiter's Energy Sword. Thomas saw his chance to kill Grievous, once and for all.


Would have been better if;

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Suddenly, Half-Jaw had Grievous' right hand occupied with his Energy Sword. The Arbiter had his left hand occupied with parrying his Energy Sword. Thomas saw that he had a chance to kill Grievous, once and for all.
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 23, 2005 10:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
Right sorry about the grammar errors.
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 23, 2005 10:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
You just sit these out don't you Razz, I must confess I haven't read this series in ages, I might try to read them all in the holidays, but I can't promise.
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PostPosted: Mon Sep 26, 2005 10:44 am    Post subject: Reply with quote
Well i do have one thing to say and that is dispite all the funny twists of stories i really like this series.
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