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PostPosted: Mon Aug 29, 2005 3:17 pm    Post subject: Rainbows and Butterflies Reply with quote

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Rainbows and Butterflies
Posted by Mainevent
27 August 2005, 3:26 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Mainevent0827050326401.html
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 29, 2005 3:46 pm    Post subject: poem Reply with quote

Wow. Kind of creepy. Maybe it means something that I can't comprehend. Yeah. It was really really good.
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 29, 2005 5:08 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I liked it. Too short though.

Kinda gave me that "accepting your fate' sence.
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 29, 2005 10:18 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Good poem, hopeless yet hopefull. Sad yet happy. etc.

9.5/10

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PostPosted: Tue Aug 30, 2005 1:10 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

It was okay.


I thought that it was quite short. And while the meaning was evident, I also thought it could have had more impact and depth to it. Perhaps the small amount of material prevented me from really delving into it, but I did not think it the most monumentous poem of the sort.

Regardless, it was still a good one. I enjoyed it, no matter how brief it may have been. As for flow... That was okay, but could have been slightly improved.

Poems... Not my thing anyway.
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 30, 2005 1:11 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'm rusty on my poems. School's been breaking my back (literally).
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 30, 2005 1:28 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yeah you seem a little rusty. It was okay, although it didn't flow much with me. And meh, I'm back in school too, Confused I don't have much time to do much of anything now. Weekends is once again to only good time to write now.
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 30, 2005 8:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Contented, I feel a better word could have been used there, nice work giving a feeling of acceptance in death.
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