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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 3:14 pm    Post subject: Data Retrieval Reply with quote

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Posted by Mainevent
19 August 2005, 12:12 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Mainevent0819050012061.html
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 3:52 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Jesus Main. I love these things that have the transmisions and stuff in them. This time, I was reminded of the other one you did, and the Flood cutscene.
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 5:25 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

So, will this and the other transmission be a series of some sort? Or are you going to tie this into a normally-written kind of a story? The problem with these kind of 'episodes' is that when the novelty wears off, you're left wondering if there's anything more to it. That is, is there any meat left on them bones? (Gawd, that's horrible.)
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 5:35 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Did I miss something?

Edit: It seems I did miss something. Upon reading your first installment of this series, I still have no idea what's going on. You sure are doing a damn good job of making everything speculative. I can only assume the Spartans rebeled and Linda was the person sniping in the vent.

In regards to the Tangos in the first installment, you got me.

This is good.
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 8:31 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'll throw down some more story for you.

John was sent in on a mission with the team, and told they were to assess and contain any contamination at the Hyperion Complex by activating the facility's failsafe. But, upon arriving, they were ambushed, the team began being wiped out, and the real containment team (an aircraft of some sort) to wipe everything out. John and one other escaped, but everyone else was killed.

The person reading the reports was General Patterson. Who was, after his contact with Cortana, in grave danger (she had been secluded and firewalled). She told him to run and he ran. Two SWAT-like teams were waiting in the Terminal (the only place to get out of the city quickly and cheaply without a car [which he couldn't keep for obvious reasons]). But the SWAT teams weren't there for him, they were there for John, who they suspected would meet him there (through the now released Cortana) - More on that later in the series-. He showed up, they attacked, but something went wrong. There was a sniper (glad you suspected Linda, because it was Very Happy) and the teams were pretty much wiped out (I think I left one alive.

After that and you've got to wait.
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:32 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

So John and teh team were betrayed?
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 10:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 11:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Basically yes.
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PostPosted: Sat Aug 20, 2005 12:29 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very awesome man, very new.

Good luck!

\../ Mad \../

Rock on!
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PostPosted: Sat Aug 20, 2005 5:05 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Brilliant, I can't wait to see where you're taking this.
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PostPosted: Sat Aug 20, 2005 7:33 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

This is very unique, and I love the transcript-style - but I think I already mentioned that, no?

Well, I'll be waiting for your next one. Keep 'em coming!
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PostPosted: Sat Aug 20, 2005 9:18 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I find that, sometimes, transcript style can do more by revealing nothing than an entire ajdective filled paragraph can.
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PostPosted: Sun Aug 21, 2005 1:39 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Excellent. It seems almost like the Umbrella corp. in Resident Evil trying to cover itself up.

9.75/10

I'll be looking for the continuation of this in the next update Smile

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PostPosted: Sun Aug 21, 2005 2:12 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I can't promise next update. You'll have to settle for as soon as possible.
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PostPosted: Sun Aug 21, 2005 5:26 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Next update. *Holds gun to head*

Nah man take your time.
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