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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 3:14 pm    Post subject: Ho Ho Ho(so sayeth the Santa) Reply with quote

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Ho Ho Ho(so sayeth the Santa)
Posted by SeverianofUrth
18 August 2005, 6:43 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=SeverianofUr0818051843571.html
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 5:29 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I think I get it, but I'm not sure.

...

I think I get it...
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 5:33 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks, man. Smile

The confusion wasn't intended; its mostly my inability to communicate clearly. And this damned iMac's keyboard.

Really, though, sorry about the confusion. I should've paid more attention... and reading through it again, I can also detect some GPS errors too. But hey, I'm out of practice! (Fine, that's not a valid excuse.)

But thanks for reading. Very Happy
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 5:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I think it was about a marine wo lost his mother in the war. He's trying to forget that was is mom cause he saw her die.

Something like that?
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 5:54 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

No! Embarassed Crying or Very sad

Oh, man. Now I know what to work on. It was about a kid in a emergency shelter huddling with three other people and afterwards going back home to find it in ruins and seeing his mother's charred corpse. heh. Sorry.
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 6:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yea, I didn't get it.
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 8:40 pm    Post subject: Good Reply with quote

At first I was confused on what this was about, Confused but I think I get it now. It was a pretty good poem? short story? I couldent tell. Things like that confuse me... Embarassed 8.4/10
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

A poem, pooman.

Anyways, very nice, Severian. Glad to see you have returned... again.

I enjoyed it, but yes, you do need to work on the communication towards us; it doesn't have to be direct or exact, but it doesn't necessarily have to be extremely vague, either.

Keep it up, man.
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PostPosted: Sat Aug 20, 2005 12:15 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very metaphorical I guess, not really sure? Anywhere between a 5 and 9/10 depending on if there is meaning behind what you wrote. I didn't really see any Halo relation here.

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 20, 2005 12:21 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

It was confusing, I didn't know who was talking, so watch out for that next time. Other than that, it was alrigh.

Good to see you, and never quite.

\../ Mad \../

Rock on!
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PostPosted: Sat Aug 20, 2005 8:37 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Having read your explanation beforehand, I thought this was rich and deep. And if I hadn't read your explanation?

We'll never know Very Happy

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PostPosted: Sun Aug 21, 2005 3:37 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Weird, and......no, just weird. Nice job.
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 23, 2005 9:34 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yes, you are out of practice.


I thought it could have been better. A bit more flow and more substance, more impact and better conveying of the material. I wouldn't have gotten it had I not read your explenation. It hinted at it, yes, but it was not clear enough.

So just practice more and work harder on the next one. Nice to see you posting though. Keep it up.
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PostPosted: Wed Aug 24, 2005 2:18 pm    Post subject: story Reply with quote

Seems like something out of Edgar Allen Poe. Except he rhymes his poems.
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