HBO Fan Fiction

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Ho Ho Ho(so sayeth the Santa)
Posted by SeverianofUrth
18 August 2005, 6:43 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=SeverianofUr0818051843571.html

thedarkfire · Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 5:29 pm Post subject:

I think I get it, but I'm not sure.

...

I think I get it...

SeverianofUrth · Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 5:33 pm Post subject:

Thanks, man. Smile

The confusion wasn't intended; its mostly my inability to communicate clearly. And this damned iMac's keyboard.

Really, though, sorry about the confusion. I should've paid more attention... and reading through it again, I can also detect some GPS errors too. But hey, I'm out of practice! (Fine, that's not a valid excuse.)

But thanks for reading. Very Happy

thedarkfire · Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 5:45 pm Post subject:

I think it was about a marine wo lost his mother in the war. He's trying to forget that was is mom cause he saw her die.

Something like that?

SeverianofUrth · Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 5:54 pm Post subject:

No!

Oh, man. Now I know what to work on. It was about a kid in a emergency shelter huddling with three other people and afterwards going back home to find it in ruins and seeing his mother's charred corpse. heh. Sorry.

thedarkfire · Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 6:15 pm Post subject:

Yea, I didn't get it.

Pooman · Member Joined: 18 Aug 2005 Posts: 86 Location: Kentucky

At first I was confused on what this was about,

but I think I get it now. It was a pretty good poem? short story? I couldent tell. Things like that confuse me... Embarassed

8.4/10

CoLd BlooDed · Posted: Fri Aug 19, 2005 9:23 pm Post subject:

A poem, pooman.

Anyways, very nice, Severian. Glad to see you have returned... again.

I enjoyed it, but yes, you do need to work on the communication towards us; it doesn't have to be direct or exact, but it doesn't necessarily have to be extremely vague, either.

Keep it up, man.

'Nosolee · Member Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 73 Location: Manhattan

Very metaphorical I guess, not really sure? Anywhere between a 5 and 9/10 depending on if there is meaning behind what you wrote. I didn't really see any Halo relation here.

-'Nos

Solidus Snake · Posted: Sat Aug 20, 2005 12:21 am Post subject:

It was confusing, I didn't know who was talking, so watch out for that next time. Other than that, it was alrigh.

Good to see you, and never quite.

\../ Mad

\../

Rock on!

Chuckles · Posted: Sat Aug 20, 2005 8:37 am Post subject:

Having read your explanation beforehand, I thought this was rich and deep. And if I hadn't read your explanation?

We'll never know Very Happy

C.T. Clown

Commander Demitri Wolf · Posted: Sun Aug 21, 2005 3:37 am Post subject:

Weird, and......no, just weird. Nice job.

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

Yes, you are out of practice.

I thought it could have been better. A bit more flow and more substance, more impact and better conveying of the material. I wouldn't have gotten it had I not read your explenation. It hinted at it, yes, but it was not clear enough.

So just practice more and work harder on the next one. Nice to see you posting though. Keep it up.
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Michael Archer · Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2005 2:18 pm Post subject: story

Seems like something out of Edgar Allen Poe. Except he rhymes his poems.