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The Enemy Within-Chapter Seventeen: Enter In The Black Masters
Posted by Mind_Affecting_Parasite (pbplayer_24@yahoo.com)
8 September 2004, 9:31 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=mind_affecti.09080421312817.html

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

I noticed some grammar and spelling mistakes in there, keep an eye out for those. There were some spots that seemed to go just barely too quickly, but other than that, the detail was fine, on the most part anyway.
Just as good as your others, and still continuing with this series. Well, I will look forward to see how you end this.
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-MCC

Covie_Lover · Member Joined: 07 Aug 2004 Posts: 280

Great job, I always like it when writers give the Covenant viewpoint a chance. Alot of people just use humans as characters. I don't like that. It seems so one-dimensional to me.

Swift'n'Painful · Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2004 6:35 pm Post subject:

It was a fantastic new addition to your ongoing series, LUV IT!!!!! and yea there were some grammer mistakes, but hey, no one's perfect Cool

and I cant wait for the next chapter, so.... hurry and type, lol, just kiddin

thedarkfire · Posted: Wed Sep 15, 2004 9:15 pm Post subject:

I can't say anything that MCC didn't say. Good job.

Forerunner's Advocate · Member Joined: 25 Sep 2004 Posts: 8 Location: My Computer

MAP, MAP, MAP, you really should get this published when you are done it is truly a work of art. The description was beautiful.

Mind_Affecting_Parasite · Posted: Sun Oct 03, 2004 9:33 pm Post subject:

Really? Well, I'm flattered really... but published? Aw shucks.

Well, seems I got some good comments here. Yeah, I kinda like writing about Covies. Lets me write about something that is totally alien, make 'em fierce and, well, different. Plus, I get to make stuff up with ranks and such.
Well, don't you worry. I'm typing up my next chapter right now (already posted the next H:SCE), and I may get it up by the next update. If not, expect it on the one after.

Jenkins · Posted: Mon Oct 04, 2004 2:24 pm Post subject:

I really liked this chapter. You need to watch some of those spelling errors, but sometimes even thos can't be helped. Rock on you body- infesting, non-discriminant, squid-like, especially tasty with salt, lifeform!

Ooh dramatisism!!!