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hboff Site Admin
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 3:47 pm Post subject: |
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| Transcript, transcript transcript. Mind you, this one isn't that bad. |
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Myth0117 Member
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 5:14 pm Post subject: |
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| not to bad but i think by Johnson referring to the Sergeant at the armory as "Gunns" is the man's appreviation for gunnery sergeant not his actual name, pretty good though thats just what i think, i could be wrong, keep it up |
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Myth0117 Member
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 5:14 pm Post subject: |
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| not to bad but i think by Johnson referring to the Sergeant at the armory as "Gunns" is the man's appreviation for gunnery sergeant not his actual name, pretty good though thats just what i think, i could be wrong, keep it up |
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Zephyr Member

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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 5:49 pm Post subject: |
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| Quote: | | The elevator doors in the room opened, to reveal Sergeant Johnson, a survivor of the destruction of Reach as wellas halo, in a crisp white dress uniform that contrasted with his dark skin. |
Don't italicize well, it sounds off. If you must, italicize 'as well as', not just one of those words.
Myth, I'd say his name is Gunns.
Overall, it was quite good, better than most transcripts Ive seen. _________________ For what is a man profited, if he should gain the whole world, but lose his soul? |
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Zen-Army Member
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 6:05 pm Post subject: |
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| perhaps he is a gunnery sgt named gunns. |
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Boy.I.Like.Halo Member
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 8:00 pm Post subject: |
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| I liked it the same as the first. I cant wait for the Quarintine zone part. |
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Michael Archer Member
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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 8:33 pm Post subject: story |
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Don't write transcript!
We already know what happened in the transcript. Why rewrite it? Come up with an orginal idea. |
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'Nosolee Member

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Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 8:54 pm Post subject: |
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Good, is this going to be a transcript of Halo 2 or will it evolve into something more like I'm doing with After Fate?
For a transcript, 9/10 |
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Sebasman Member

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Posted: Wed Aug 03, 2005 10:40 pm Post subject: |
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this is really good!! bungie should hire you as a writer 4 this 1!!!
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(This post has been edited by Dave. Sebasman, your account and IP can, and WILL be banned from the site if you do not comply with the rules.) |
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Jester Member
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Posted: Wed Aug 03, 2005 11:06 pm Post subject: |
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| You can write whatever you want, but not everyone here likes transcripts. |
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Dagorath Member
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2005 3:58 am Post subject: |
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| Mmmmm. Actually, I've not seen a lot of transcripts on HBO Fan Fic at all. I'll try. |
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sdn Member
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2005 5:03 am Post subject: |
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| I'm pretty sure Guns is his rank, not his name. |
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Mainevent Member
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Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2005 5:13 am Post subject: |
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Gunnery Sergeant=Guns.
Common nickname. |
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