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Halo 2: Defense and Offense - Chapter 1
Posted by Dagorath (hoyinshan@gmail.com)
26 July 2005, 4:52 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Dagorath0726050452321.html

Boy.I.Like.Halo · Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 7:12 pm Post subject:

HOLY CRAP!! I have been waiting for someone to write about the game its self. You are the first Ive seen to come to the plate. Very Good.

Boy.I.Like.Halo · Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 7:21 pm Post subject:

I will also add that the use of code was good. But... I saw that you said the chief killed grunts jackals ect. But Brutes? Oh I remeber the first strike. Embarassed

Guardian · Posted: Fri Jul 29, 2005 9:06 pm Post subject:

Oh god, another Cut-Scene Transcript...

Code - 5/10

Transcript - 2/10

Total - 7/10

Zephyr · Posted: Sat Jul 30, 2005 1:54 am Post subject:

His was decent, Shadow.
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Solidus Snake · Posted: Sat Jul 30, 2005 4:17 am Post subject:

Ah! Personally in a story, I don't like the Chief, I don't like the actually Halo 2 storyline.

SYSTEM · Posted: Sat Jul 30, 2005 5:05 am Post subject:

Syotica · Posted: Sat Jul 30, 2005 3:33 pm Post subject:

Best transcript I've read. Nice. And when you said slayer of 'Brutes', they haven't encountered them yet, not until High Charity.

SYSTEM · Posted: Sat Jul 30, 2005 5:59 pm Post subject:

Well, that reminds me.

I forgot to say,

- You did a good job, Dagorath.
And for that, I also wish to thank you too, fer puttin' up with me and my ranting and raving.

But, my original words still stand: Creativity is one of the better elements in writing, and it's someone everyone is capable of: Everyone can dream, and have ideas, but unless you harness them and put them to work, they'll remain as dreams, and you'll remain ordinary. So, although you missed out on the "Hell Yeah!" this time, I'm sure next one will get one. Heck, maybe you'll even net yerself two "Hell Yeahs" if you keep this up.

- Dave.
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Zephyr · Posted: Sun Jul 31, 2005 10:16 pm Post subject:

They encountered Brutes in FS, on the Unyielding Herophant.
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Dagorath · Posted: Sun Aug 07, 2005 3:56 am Post subject:

Well, thanks Dave. Actually I found writing the transcript quite hard, cos I don't really have Halo 2: I've played it a few times and I looked at the cutscenes. What I'm trying to do now (I'm on Ch 3 right now) is put in more of the Chief's emotions. He seemed a bit 2D in the Halo stories so I'm trying to flesh him out a little.

Of course, little bits have to be added. Lots of fun things from High Charity, perhaps a bit of the Arbiter's history or what he does before going to the gas station.