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Riverside Party: Chapter 2
Posted by Dagorath (hoyinshan@gmail.com)
21 July 2005, 11:17 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Dagorath0721051117211.html

Syotica · Posted: Fri Jul 22, 2005 4:36 pm Post subject:

I liked it, but my friend, no Covenant ever says 'sir'. It breaks the character.

Spinning on their heel. Too much Human military.

"Oh come on, man"

No. Too Human.

Zephyr · Posted: Sat Jul 23, 2005 2:16 am Post subject:

Yeah, the Covenant were far too human-ish.
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Boy.I.Like.Halo · Posted: Sat Jul 23, 2005 2:35 am Post subject:

i liked it. But a real covenant soldeir would call their commander something like exellency or ... commander. And they would say warthog. They would say human assult vehicle or something like that. But all in all it was good and I expect more.

Helljumper · Member Joined: 31 Jul 2004 Posts: 298 Location: Pittsburgh

i stopped after the elite commander said, one minute. when u write from the covenant point of view, u have to be true to their character.

ODST

Dagorath · Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2005 4:52 am Post subject:

Yeah, you've got a point.

Zephyr · Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2005 8:07 pm Post subject:

Yeah. Instead of 'minute' you would use 'unit' or 'cycle' I believe.
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