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Riverside Party: Chapter 2

 
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 22, 2005 4:22 pm    Post subject: Riverside Party: Chapter 2 Reply with quote

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Riverside Party: Chapter 2
Posted by Dagorath (hoyinshan@gmail.com)
21 July 2005, 11:17 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Dagorath0721051117211.html
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 22, 2005 4:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I liked it, but my friend, no Covenant ever says 'sir'. It breaks the character.

Spinning on their heel. Too much Human military.

"Oh come on, man"

No. Too Human.
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 23, 2005 2:16 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yeah, the Covenant were far too human-ish.
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 23, 2005 2:35 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

i liked it. But a real covenant soldeir would call their commander something like exellency or ... commander. And they would say warthog. They would say human assult vehicle or something like that. But all in all it was good and I expect more.
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 25, 2005 2:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

i stopped after the elite commander said, one minute. when u write from the covenant point of view, u have to be true to their character.

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 26, 2005 4:52 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yeah, you've got a point.
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PostPosted: Tue Jul 26, 2005 8:07 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yeah. Instead of 'minute' you would use 'unit' or 'cycle' I believe.
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