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PostPosted: Mon Jun 27, 2005 3:04 pm    Post subject: The force of Gravity Reply with quote

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The force of Gravity
Posted by kamikaze343 (str8_kamikaze343@yahoo.com)
26 June 2005, 12:32 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=kamikaze3430626050032031.html
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PostPosted: Mon Jun 27, 2005 9:26 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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Cishhhhhhhhhhh


try not to use that. Instead describe what is happening.

"The air hissed away, as the cabin pressure dropped. Red klaxons continued to sream. The passengers struggled in the small confined space to find the location of the breach. Finally the captian found it, but unfortunately it was too late. He reached for a seal the air died, followed by gurgling sounds. The transmittion ended there, leaving the crew listening on the other side in confusion and shock."

like so ^
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PostPosted: Wed Jun 29, 2005 3:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

GPS problems, there were so many mistakes that it made the story hard to follow. and the pilot won't be an airman. airman is an airforce term and is for enlisted personnel. They won't fly. If the pelican is UNSC, it would be a Navy pilot and an officer. if it is a Marine Corps pilot then officer or warrent officer

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