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PostPosted: Thu Jun 23, 2005 10:24 am    Post subject: Sergeant Steven Dowel Reply with quote

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Posted by Mark Lieberg (malieberg@msn.com)
22 June 2005, 10:48 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Mark_Lieberg0622052248351.html
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 24, 2005 1:55 am    Post subject: I see they were all men. Reply with quote

You never mentioned a women in your whole story. Evil or Very Mad
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 24, 2005 3:24 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

...no comment on that last reply..haha..-_-'
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 24, 2005 11:13 am    Post subject: Re: I see they were all men. Reply with quote

klim wrote:
You never mentioned a women in your whole story. Evil or Very Mad


Was he supposed to?

Peace! Confused
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 24, 2005 11:52 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Read my other story. Halo 2 Altered Version of True Spartans

that has female spartans in it so read that when ever it gets posted when im done.

Im kind of confused why the ot post? no help or advice that i need to change? well anyways that was just the prolouge, nothing about what he's about to do in 2552....on a planet..you'll read it soon.
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 25, 2005 4:07 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

On a planet. Hmmm. I think I'll wait. Wink
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 25, 2005 7:29 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

wow actually got another comment. Yeah the next two chapters should be good. But there will only be three more chapter...i dont really want to write a whole series. I like to mke short stories like the UNSC First Contact I wrote..which I enjoyed actually.

go to halo source to read it there. Peace.
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 25, 2005 4:18 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice.
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PostPosted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 1:28 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

thxs
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PostPosted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 2:22 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very nice Mark, keep this up. Just watch the capitals.

-CDW
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PostPosted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 11:56 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

It was good, nice formatting, very neat and easy on the eye and a pleasure to read as well. Just watch all the capitals, you seemed to capatilise almost every second word. You should probably proofread more- I know you're an eager beaver when it comes to writing and the last thing I'm gonnja tell you to do is slow down, but maybe read through a print out during lunch or something, making little corrections with a pencil and stuff.

I thought I'd lost faith in you a while back, but you've made it all better since.

Just remember to listen to what people say. Although I don't think you get nearly enough reveiws. . .

-Sush; very good story.
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PostPosted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 12:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thx. Yeah. Im watching for those capitals. im checking the second chapter right now. I already written this on April 22, so yeah. Ive been editing and all that for a while.
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PostPosted: Mon Jun 27, 2005 12:16 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I submited both the last two chapters. And yes, I did check for mistakes. Ask Master Sushi. I watched for capitals, and added alittle more to the story like details, which dont get you led off a bridge.

so everything should make sense in the last two chapters. Hope you review and enjoy reading them.

Btw. Chapter 8 should be done by friday the min. It could take a bit...I dont know. A good writer doesnt rush his work. A great writer takes his time, like this series which i wrote two months ago starting april 22. Took me a week to write these three chapters, and more to edit. So I hope you enjoy.

thanks so much.
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