HBO Fan Fiction

hboff · Site Admin Joined: 25 Jul 2004 Posts: 4351

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Survival Instincts, Chapter 1
Posted by GLADIATRRR3000 (gladiatrrr2002@hotmail.com)
31 August 2004, 4:58 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=gladiatrrr30.0831040458492.html

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

Good storyline. I like it. Fair use of detail, Would have liked indentations though. Now, maybe all of those kids play paintball often, but you made killing those Covenant sound like childs play. Wasn't sure about that.
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echo3kilo · Member Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 25 Location: cary, nc

good work, you seem to know what you're doing. I look forward to the next installments.

Nick Kang · Posted: Fri Sep 03, 2004 3:08 am Post subject:

Yeah, it was good. But it seemed a little rushed towards the end. Try to work on that and it'll be awesome!
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