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Survival Instincts, Chapter 1/2

 
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PostPosted: Wed Sep 01, 2004 2:37 pm    Post subject: Survival Instincts, Chapter 1/2 Reply with quote

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Survival Instincts, Chapter 1/2
Posted by GLADIATRRR3000 (gladiatrrr2002@hotmail.com)
31 August 2004, 4:57 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=gladiatrrr30.0831040457071.html
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PostPosted: Thu Sep 02, 2004 8:42 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Interesting way to start a fic. With teens and what not. Could have used indentations and a bit more detail though. I like how you came up with future gadgets, things that would most certainly be around in five hundred years. Some people don't bother, and use regular technolgy.
Anyway, already read chap one.
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 03, 2004 1:46 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Now, when I have to make breakfast, I have to actually mix the pancake batter, make the pancakes, pour the juice/milk, make the eggs, and grill the sausage patties...and here's this guy fretting because he has to walk up to his oven and say 'Gimme a Big Mac.' Us Humans must get really lazy in the next 550 years... Laughing

Anyway, awesome story. If memory serves, this is the first story of your that I have read...but I'll read more of 'em, surely. I think it's pretty cool that everything is automated and stuff. And it was short. That was the shortest I have read in a long time, and it was refreshing, but ou might want to make the next chapter a bit longer.
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PostPosted: Fri Sep 03, 2004 3:54 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

the origional chapter was over the 32k limit, so i had to bisect it. that's why this chapter is short.
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