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Epitaph of Destruction, Prologue

 
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 10, 2005 4:00 pm    Post subject: Epitaph of Destruction, Prologue Reply with quote

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Epitaph of Destruction, Prologue
Posted by Insomnia (karsinogen@gmail.com)
5 June 2005, 10:49 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=insomnia.0605052249191.html
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 10, 2005 5:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yes, the backstory will be confusing at first. Let me know if you have any understanding problems. Wink
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 11, 2005 1:10 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey man, long time, no see? Sure, I'll get to reading this, it's been so long!

By the way, did you change your email address? It looks different from last time.

- Dave.
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 11, 2005 1:24 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

First of all.

Does Davy-Poo Need a hug?

Second, yup. We haven't seen you in Ages, I liked the story. Quite nicely done.
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 11, 2005 1:40 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks. Actually I didnt change it, I am using Gmail because it is far superior to the other e-mail addresses.

Anyway, I was stupid enough to post this as a single story. Looks like I have to repost it with Chapter One, which will explain what has happened.
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 11, 2005 5:24 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

few grammar mistakes but the story is good. wow we lost the war, that kinda sucks. lets see where u take this.

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 11, 2005 6:31 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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This is Zurr 'Xafomee, Captain of the Guardians of the Covenant, rank of Black Field Master and interlaced with irony.
Reminds me of how characters feelings were convayed and such in the novelisation of Revenge fo the Sith. Good job though.
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 11, 2005 8:44 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow, I like, I like!

The Covenant POV was very well done, but I didn't really feel attached to any of the characters, they all went by as one after another.

The story was good, but the way you portrayed the destruction of Earth and the events proceeding it (e.g., No Humans have been sighted, we have destroyed the last of their cities, the major destruction of Earth) make it sound like no humans escaped. And that would suck. Because we rule.
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 11, 2005 11:40 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Just to let you know, you'll see 'Omnamamee and 'Xafomee alot more. They are the main characters, and you'll get to see the Guardians ability in combat.

Also, this story will be reposted, free of errors, as a series, with Chapter I.
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PostPosted: Sun Jun 12, 2005 10:43 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

!Yo mucho gusto!(How the hell do you do an upside down exclamtion point?) That's sadistic that we lost and Earth is destroyed. Cool, but sadistic, still. Original, almost every damn story is about the HUman vs. Covenant war, including mine, but this one, i guess, isn't. If it is, then, htf?
Also, I'm suprised no one noticed, but, 600 Covenant ships could not fire off a hundred thousand shots in a single salvo!! I believe it would be around 5000 shots if they all fired every plasma turret at once.
Minor detail, but still)
I'll be waiting for your next one.
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PostPosted: Mon Jun 13, 2005 1:29 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

A different aspect of a well known thing is always welcome in my books. We lost, and I don't know why, but I find myself welcoming that. It could be that I am just a deranged person, or lack of sleep.

I liked the story. Any mistakes I would mention already have been. It was good.
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PostPosted: Mon Jun 13, 2005 1:24 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Shadow wrote:
First of all.

Does Davy-Poo Need a hug?

Second, yup. We haven't seen you in Ages, I liked the story. Quite nicely done.


there's a pun in "Ages", I think. By the way, I'll get to this when I'm home, I'm interested in it already. Wink

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PostPosted: Tue Aug 01, 2006 6:45 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Good stuff- I don't normaly go in for Covenant perspective work, but it seems to have become fairly orthodox now...

...Anyway, some solid writing, quality action and an intersting premise.
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