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Mission From SATU part 7: A Knife, a Clip and a Shotgun
Posted by Chuckles
29 August 2004, 11:50 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=chuckles.0829041150537.html

Chuckles · Posted: Mon Aug 30, 2004 2:23 pm Post subject:

I went through this for hours before I posted it, but I STILL found a typo (in this case, an extra word). Life goes on.

By this time in the story a lot is going on, but I am still trying to keep it personal. I hope I succeeded.

C.T. Clown

Helljumper · Member Joined: 31 Jul 2004 Posts: 298 Location: Pittsburgh

Damn your writing is gettign better. But damn u killed me off. U suck

ODST

no i'm not joking, u killed me, u suck

Shaolin Fist · Member Joined: 31 Jul 2004 Posts: 27

man...this is gonna get ugly...i know, i just know C.T. is gonna screw with my head again.

CoLd BlooDed · Posted: Mon Aug 30, 2004 9:40 pm Post subject:

Awesome, just awesome. You have your own unique way of writing, and I respect you for that. The dialogue was impeccable.

Since Helljumper is in there, I believe it's fair for me to in there, too. Razz

Now there's a thought... Wink

Anyways, great.

hunter_that_dances · Member Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 30

Great as always. But kill Ackerson, man, kil Ackerson...

(Let Dr. Halsey strangle him to death Very Happy

!)

Chuckles · Posted: Tue Aug 31, 2004 2:02 pm Post subject:

Helljumper, don't blame me. It was YOU that didn't have the guts to shoot those kids. Wimp Very Happy

At least he went out with honor.

C.T. Clown

Helljumper · Member Joined: 31 Jul 2004 Posts: 298 Location: Pittsburgh

i don't see being shot in the back as honor. Damn could i have atleast fought, and if a superiour officer told me to kill the little fuckers, i would have.

ODST

and i would a jackhammer to do it

Chuckles · Posted: Tue Aug 31, 2004 9:45 pm Post subject:

Actually, you weren't shot in the back. You would shoot nine-year olds? Brutal.

C.T. Clown

Chuckles · Posted: Wed Sep 01, 2004 1:01 am Post subject:

Okay Helljumper, would you have liked this better:

Helljumper smirked as he looked through his scope. Twenty-seven helpless nine-year olds wandered bored. They won't be bored long.
"Okay boys, sight sight in. Whooooeeeee! That's what I call target-rich! A case of the General's best scotch to the one who scores the most headshots!"

Like that better? Question

C.T. Clown

hunter_that_dances · Member Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 30

Helljumper, Chuckles puts u into his story and u don't even show gratitude? damn, you're hardcore.

Helljumper · Member Joined: 31 Jul 2004 Posts: 298 Location: Pittsburgh

hey chuckles, except for the part where u made me sound like a Redneck. Couldn't I have been more professional. Anyway its probably better you killed me off, I would have hated to be killed by a SPARTAN.

ODST

Chuckles · Posted: Wed Sep 01, 2004 2:57 pm Post subject:

You know, I thought that you wouldn't want to be killed by a Spartan. He was a good character and I'm glad I had him in there.

C.T. Clown

System Failure · Member Joined: 05 Aug 2004 Posts: 29 Location: Queens, NY

We should all do that, put other board members in the fan fic just to kill them off. But if any put me in and has me die some stupid way. I will send the soul-Suckers, Hahaha ! Twisted Evil

Helljumper · Member Joined: 31 Jul 2004 Posts: 298 Location: Pittsburgh

Hmmm, soul suckers sounds like a lollipop

ODST

can i get one in cherry devil